Prompt 4.03

Oct 17, 2006 07:22

Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers

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jack o'neill, set 4, prompts

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Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph October 30 2006, 04:26:19 UTC
1. One of his earliest memories was of a big farm dog his folk’s owned; already gray-muzzled when Jack was born. There are a couple of black and white photos of him as a toddler, sleeping with the dog. One from a family camping trip, another has them on an old quilt at some park. He doesn’t remember much about the dog; only how nice, warm and safe it was to sleep with someone, some body, wrapped around him.

2. One summer Jack found a lizard that had fallen into the small pool in his backyard; he rescued it proudly. His mom took him to a flea market and he spent his one and only fifty-cent piece on a cracked fish tank to keep it safe. Catching live bugs to keep it fed was trickier, but he took his responsibility seriously. After a few weeks, he found the lizard on the floor, dead and bloody, victim of his sister’s cat. When he realized it got out because he hadn’t put the lid on tight after the last feeding; he was so ashamed he told his family he’d let it go. After that, he gave the tank away and refused to catch anything but fish.

3. He got his very own puppy after begging for two years. Naming him Oz, because no way was he going to call him Toto. He told his friends it was short for Ozzie. He was a big goofy mutt and they did everything together. If Oz couldn’t go, Jack didn’t want to go. It worked both ways. A week after Jack left for basic training, Oz died.

4. While imprisoned in Iraq, he formed a sort of companionship with a rat; the four legged kind. He named him Cromwell. When Jack finally left that hellhole, he was happy to leave Cromwell behind.

5. About a month before Charlie died, they’d given him a puppy. The damn thing was always playful, excited and happy; it didn’t realize Charlie wasn’t there any more. Sara gave the puppy away the day after Charlie’s funeral because she was afraid Jack would shoot it. She was right.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers niamaea October 31 2006, 02:12:26 UTC
About a month before Charlie died, they’d given him a puppy. The damn thing was always playful, excited and happy; it didn’t realize Charlie wasn’t there any more.

Oh.

1, 2, and 3 are sweet and sad...4 is so Jack. By, my God, 5 hurts.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph October 31 2006, 20:00:16 UTC
Thank you. Glad I got it right. :)

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers rigel_7 October 31 2006, 03:06:47 UTC
1, 2, and 3 are lovely and nostalgic, with just a touch of sadness to them.

4 Gives a bit of a jolt, and 5 - that one is just heartbreaking.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph October 31 2006, 20:05:40 UTC
lovely and nostalgic, with just a touch of sadness to them.
Memories of childhood pets are like that, aren't they?
Thanks, very much :)

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers msbeata October 31 2006, 19:47:40 UTC
#3 made me cry.

These are all very Jack.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph October 31 2006, 20:10:46 UTC
Wow! I really appreciate you telling me that it made you cry. That's one of the best compliments I've ever had. As a very new writer, I REALLY appreciate all of your comments.

Thank you, so much.

*hugs*

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers narissala November 1 2006, 23:34:10 UTC
I like these a lot. Though 4 & 5 make me want to just comfort Jack through his pain.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph November 2 2006, 00:16:17 UTC
Thank you, I really do appreciate the detailed the feedback.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph November 2 2006, 00:19:36 UTC
*headdesk*
Even if I typed it wrong! *g*

I appreciate the detailed feedback, it helps to know what people like (or dislike).

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers sef1029 November 2 2006, 18:49:02 UTC
These are so sad. I hope Jack gets a dog when he retires--and it doesn't die on him.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph November 2 2006, 22:58:21 UTC
Yeah, they are sad, that's why I had to do two lists.
Maybe if there's a Jack and retirement prompt, I'll give him one!

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers sidlj November 3 2006, 16:06:06 UTC
*sniffs* Oz!

Oh, god, Charlie's puppy. Smart woman, Sara. Oh, that is just heart-breaking.

#1 is so sweet - wish I could see those old photos. :-)

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph November 3 2006, 16:51:32 UTC
That's why I had to do another list. The Charlie's puppy one even got to me, but I can just see him feeling that way.
Thanks.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers whimsicalwhims November 13 2006, 03:40:27 UTC
Sara gave the puppy away the day after Charlie’s funeral because she was afraid Jack would shoot it. She was right.

This one is so painful (which translates to nice job, btw). I can just see Jack, after the funeral, sitting in a chair while the puppy tries to play with his feet, and Jack can't even stand to look at it.

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Re: Five pets Jack O'Neill remembers starglyph November 13 2006, 04:45:45 UTC
Yeah, ouch.

Thanks so much for that comment! If you can really picture it, I did it right. :)

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