Fic 34 of 100 for fanfic100 -- "Green"

[severina2001]

Prompt 014 - Green.
Season One.
I have never written this style before. But I couldn't write it any other way. *shrugs*

Comments

[susanderavish]

God, these are all so fucking perfect.

He looks so tall, you have to tip your head allll the way back to see him looking... glaring... at you, and the grin splits your face because there is never a time when you’re not happy to see him.

My favorite line.

and you’ll let him call you a stupid little twat, you’ll let him demand anything, you’ll promise him almost anything as long as he keeps taking you home.

Or maybe its that one. I can't decide. I guess I'll just have to read it again and again and again until I figure it out :)

[severina2001]

What wonderful feedback. I'm sitting here with a big grin on my face feeling all smooshy. Thanks so much!

[severina2001]

I want to 'blame' you for this writing style, though I'm not sure why. It "felt" like you. LOL

Thanks for reading!

[damietta]

An interesting prequel would be how Brian hears that Justin is on the floor in the bathroom Whoa be to the man who told him!

Your characterization of Justin is so good. I can just see him crumpled on the bathroom floor and then seeing Brian's shoes, smiling and saying, "Hi!”

And, of course the Italian shoe wearing guy is the only man he'll ever love.

Deb

[severina2001]

Thank you for the great feedback. It's so nice to hear when something 'visual' came across the way I intended.

An interesting prequel would be how Brian hears that Justin is on the floor in the bathroom Whoa be to the man who told him!

Your wish is my command. Hee.

[jule1122]

Everything you write is perfect. I loved how visual this was. Such great descriptions I could picture all of it. jule

[severina2001]

That's a lovely compliment -- it's always good to know that the visual aspects came across the way I hoped they would. Thanks so much for reading. :)

[lunachickk]

Foot p0rn! It was the shoes that got me.
Seriously, this was great. Very nicely in character. I agree with whoever suggested the prequel! ;)

[severina2001]

Thanks so much. Prequel is coming up. :)