Unexpected

[sevencorvus]

Title: Unexpected
Author: SevenCorvus
Fandom: Sherlock Holmes/Iron Man (movie!verse)
Pairing/Characters: Holmes/Watson, pre-slash Tony/Steve (if you squint)
Rating: pg-13
Prompt: Expect
Summary: He was not at all like he had expected.
Warnings: slash
Disclaimer: I own nothing, except in my dreams.
Word Count: 630
Author's note: This idea came from a

Comments

[ladyblkrose]

Wow, this was surprisingly sweet. I liked the way Tony felt his connection w/ Holmes and that watching Holmes & Watson's relationship moved him to consider a relationship of his own.
Thank you for sharing, I really enjoyed this.

[eviljenyus14]

Omg I love your icon :P

And I absolutely agree, the sweetness factor is perfect, but more is needed...please :D

[sevencorvus]

"blushes" Glad you liked. And I might possibly be working on more ;)

[eviljenyus14]

YAY! *glomps* :D

[muccamukk]

I like the premise a lot. It's a crossover I can't get enough of.

Are you interested in concrit? I totally get it if you're not.

[sevencorvus]

"nods" I'm surprised there aren't more stories with this crossover out there. I wouldn't mind concrit, but be gentle with me (it's been a while since I've written).

[muccamukk]

Okay, like I said, it's a great premise, and I like the interactions you hint at, but the thing is you only hint at them. The story is long on telling us what's going on, but very short on showing it.

In the end, as miss_turner10 below points out, you need more actual scenes, with people talking to each other and what they thing about that, and Holmes deducting and Tony being a bastard about it. Otherwise, it feels a bit like a summary.

[sevencorvus]

"nods" I can see how you might think that. But if you have read any of my other fics, you'd see that this one is inline with some of my other "introspective" fics. Sometimes I have more action, but this is where the bunny lead.

[thelilytriad]

Excuse me while I shamelessly beg for more...

MOAR.

[sevencorvus]

"g" Well don't let me stand in the way of shameless begging. There might possibly be more up soon. "winks"

[ewanspotter]

This is great! I say more. :D

[sevencorvus]

"blushes" Glad you liked. And I might be working on more. "g"

[miss_turner10]

This is a great set up! How about having a crack at some dialogue in the next bit - let's hear these wonderful men interact!

[sevencorvus]

:P Do I have to? "pouts" I am not that great at writing dialogue, but I might give it a shot. "g"