Editor/Beta reader desired - short story

[servalan]

Anyone with an editorial eye want to beta an original short story? Vampires, threesomes, Highlander-esque flashbacks. (I got asked to write some vampire erotica last week; can you tell? Although, I haven't heard back from the editor since sending her some questions, so who knows what's really going to happen to this piece.)

I'm undecided on whether the first scene is necessary, and I'm worried that my vampires aren't...sparkly enough for the modern audience.

Editrices?