Fic: Put On (Good Old-Fashioned Lover Boys)

[seren_canis]

Title: Put On (Good Old-Fashioned Lover Boys)
Author: seren_canis
Rating: G
Word Count: 1479
Pairing: Remus/Sirius
Summary: He sees him everyday, like clockwork. Remus is an apprentice at a bookbinders and private-school boy Sirius passes him everyday, until the day they actually talk. Non-Magic AU.
Author's Notes Dedicated to mypretty_art as a companion for her

Comments

[brighty18]

I have so much love for this that it's not even funny, and I positively beg you to continue it. I want to know what will happen an lunch!

this is gorgeously written and the language just flows beautifully. I love reading fanfic when it doesn't sound like fanfic. Does that make sense? In other words, I love it when it actually sounds like a novel or short story. Like this: The boy is always sweaty and beaming. His carefully positioned tie is loose and low, and a button or two of his iron soft shirt are always undone. Only one button of his block-blue blazer is done up, and it is not uncommon for his sleeves to have a stain or two. He walks with his hands nonchalantly in his pockets, passing off a casual elegance that Remus never could, and that makes it difficult for Remus to look away.

You captured the whole scene so well and I know that I would have appreciated it even without he beautiful visual that inspired it. The boys are so shy and so perfect and I truly feel for Remus here. His set-up was especially nice. I liked the way his family worked and the way he sees his job.

Lovely!

PS I actually wrote this last night and forgot to hit "Post Comment." Meh.

[seren_canis]

Thank you SO very much for a wonderful comment! I'm so happy you like the language, I was worried this fic might be a little too lyrical, but I totally understand what you mean by the "not sounding like a fanfic" thing. (Which is actually such a personal compliment to me, I really aspire to be like the other great fics I've read that don't necessarily have the greatest story, but are just so beautifully written) :).

So glad you thought it did the gorgeous artwork justice and that you like Remus' characterisation. I could really picture him feeling desperately grateful to Mr Benedict, you know? I'm sooooo happy you'd like to read more, I cant make any promises, but I'll see what I can do! :)

Thanks again for the wonderful comment, so glad you enjoyed!