round 03, challenge six: results
round 03, challenge six: eliminations
#03 (-03) Fallen by mytigerhobbes
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round 03, challenge six: people's choice
#05 (+05) For you, I will. by essyllus
round 03, challenge six: mod's choice
No mod's choice for this week because I couldn't really pick. Sorry. :(
round 03, challenge six: tallies
Round Three, Challenge Six
01. A measure of wealth by hoyah
02. when the music died by gdgdbaby
03. Fallen by mytigerhobbes
04. analog in a digital world by jandi
05. For you, I will. by essyllus
06. capsize, downsize, lifesize by cokecane
07. skylights by lovelyable
08. hush hush by saengie
09. Spellbound by conditionally
round 03, challenge six: elimination comments
#01 - It feels like there wasn't much of a story in the drabble, and the smaller font and the mention of 2012 threw me - it made the whole thing jarring to me.
#01 - I didn't feel that this was any more than just a rehashing of Yunho's character, which makes it boring when it could have been so much more powerful. Also, the change in font size threw me off. The drabble would've been fine without it.
#02 - I felt like the emotion was forced on this piece, following a large event (Jackson's death.) The overall feel was very forced and it was ":/" inducing.
#03 - a great idea, but i'm not so much a fan of the execution. i stumbled on the narration and the turns of phrase scattered throughout.
#03 - feels contrived. a lot of the description in here is odd and unnecessary and detracts from the piece, because the result ended up being that the dialogue was so far apart, i had no idea what they were talking about anymore.
#03 - the writing is kind of stilted, the phrasing awkward and almost sterilized. the descriptions of yunho's leg hairs don't really contribute to the mood, i'm not sure what it means to smell like babies, and "let me make you happy" is never a question without a question mark.
#09 - I feel that the characters didn't have as much depth as the other drabbles.
#09 - It's boring, and not much of a story. The drabble seemed like every other fic I read about this pairing. It should stand out with more details.
#09 - the first paragraph seemed fine and the descriptions accurate, but the second paragraph less so to me. his shining presence is the only thing that makes sense is one part that particularly doesn't sit well with me because the word choice through out has been of a slightly higher level than this, and the 'makes sense' just makes it seem that they couldn't find any other words to express how Key feels at the moment, and it just ruins the whole thing a bit.
round 03, challenge six: favorite comments
#04 - i like the imagery (although it is a bit over the top in some places) but i really like how you interpreted this theme and the way you executed gd's realization without making it angsty, but refreshing.
#05 - It's really good. It's hard to do something with an Anyband concept, and give another meaning to it.
#05 - i thought this utilized the drabble format well. prose is good and the story is succinct without losing emotion.
#05 - I really like how the Anyband!verse feels in this, how much depth and details that have been worked into so few words.
#05 - It leaves me with the good kind of questions.
#06 - the language used is perfect and the world feels so real. you captured everybody so well, and i love the ending lines.
#06 -
#07 - I loved how the interpretation of "change a person" was portrayed in a negative sense when the typical view would be to make the change be positive. That was unexpected, in a good way.
#09 - the smallest word count, but still managed to deliver everything. it was meaningful and direct. it stood out.
misao_kunoichi and katsudono have used their skip. miraclestreet dropped out from the challenge. Thanks for participating, miraclestreet!