Grammar-wise, I found no spelling mistakes, but I did find these:
1. It would be incorrect to blame my Spider Goblin blood since Spider Goblins devoured mates and offspring, not siblings. - I'm not sure, but I would suggest changing "devoured" to "devour".
2. “Does my sister need a favor of me?” I asked, if the Slaugh were still bothering Cinder I would gladly show them that while Cinder was the superior in physical strength, I was not to be mistaken for a weak opponent. - I would suggest a full stop after "asked" instead of a comma.
3. “Neigh, my sister, the guest came to me for alternative reasons,” she said and I stared at Cinder’s main eyes joining our minds. - I think you meant "nay" rather than "nay". Also I would suggest a comma fter "eyes".
4. She is a master of only one form of magic, fire but she was so powerful that even I had to be impressed and few magics impressed me. - Watch your tenses. Seeing as the rest of the paragraph is in the past tense, change "is" to "was". Also you need a second comma after "fire".
5. Now she was being sought out by the Slaugh, how interesting. - I'd suggest a full stop rather than a comma.
6. Riordan approached and bowed in return as we rose I caught sight of his Sidhe face beneath his cloak’s hood. - I'd suggest putting a full stop after "return".
Annnnd because I'm a dumbass I pressed the "Post Comment" button before I was finished. Apologies.
7. “A pleasure indeed,” Riordan said as he bowed lower extending a hand with fingers that ended in talons as long as the digits themselves. - I'd suggest a comma after "lower".
8. I placed my hand in his keeping my talons hidden away. - I'd suggest a comma after "his".
9. Puck was a Sidhe Lord even though he was a Satyr he had earned the title on his own so pouting was a very childish move. - I'd suggest a comma after "Satyr" and after "own".
10. The other Sidhe ladies and lords continued their merriment but I found Riordan’s offer far more interesting. - I'd suggest a comma after "merriment".
11. Riordan looked concerned and I could see why, while Riordan’s face was quite lovely, his body held the look of the Slaugh. - I'd suggest a full stop after "why" instead of a comma.
I liked this piece. Lady Ash seems like a vibrant and interesting character. I love her observations and dry sense of humour. You have very vivid descriptions, so I was able to picture the scene clearly. I'd love to read more about these characters. Great job and good luck :).
Grammar-wise, I found no spelling mistakes, but I did find these:
1. It would be incorrect to blame my Spider Goblin blood since Spider Goblins devoured mates and offspring, not siblings. - I'm not sure, but I would suggest changing "devoured" to "devour".
2. “Does my sister need a favor of me?” I asked, if the Slaugh were still bothering Cinder I would gladly show them that while Cinder was the superior in physical strength, I was not to be mistaken for a weak opponent. - I would suggest a full stop after "asked" instead of a comma.
3. “Neigh, my sister, the guest came to me for alternative reasons,” she said and I stared at Cinder’s main eyes joining our minds. - I think you meant "nay" rather than "nay". Also I would suggest a comma fter "eyes".
4. She is a master of only one form of magic, fire but she was so powerful that even I had to be impressed and few magics impressed me. - Watch your tenses. Seeing as the rest of the paragraph is in the past tense, change "is" to "was". Also you need a second comma after "fire".
5. Now she was being sought out by the Slaugh, how interesting. - I'd suggest a full stop rather than a comma.
6. Riordan approached and bowed in return as we rose I caught sight of his Sidhe face beneath his cloak’s hood. - I'd suggest putting a full stop after "return".
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7. “A pleasure indeed,” Riordan said as he bowed lower extending a hand with fingers that ended in talons as long as the digits themselves. - I'd suggest a comma after "lower".
8. I placed my hand in his keeping my talons hidden away. - I'd suggest a comma after "his".
9. Puck was a Sidhe Lord even though he was a Satyr he had earned the title on his own so pouting was a very childish move. - I'd suggest a comma after "Satyr" and after "own".
10. The other Sidhe ladies and lords continued their merriment but I found Riordan’s offer far more interesting. - I'd suggest a comma after "merriment".
11. Riordan looked concerned and I could see why, while Riordan’s face was quite lovely, his body held the look of the Slaugh. - I'd suggest a full stop after "why" instead of a comma.
I liked this piece. Lady Ash seems like a vibrant and interesting character. I love her observations and dry sense of humour. You have very vivid descriptions, so I was able to picture the scene clearly. I'd love to read more about these characters. Great job and good luck :).
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