Fic: Grauidus

[penny_lane_42]

Title: Grauidus
Author: Lirazel (penny_lane_42)
Medium: Fiction
Rating: PG-13 for Spike's potty mouth
Timeperiod: post-“Not Fade Away”
Warning: Very non-explicit mpreg
Thanks to: quinara (as usual) for the title, and my betas: snickfic for (subtly! always subtly!) dropping "hints" that I needed to write her mpreg, for getting me to reign back on the internal dialogue, and (

Comments

[seapealsh]

Snick got me to like Spike mpreg with Seraph, and this is such a great start that I know I'm going to love it. I certainly hope you do continue this.

[penny_lane_42]

She got me to liking it, too! Never thought I would, but she has ~magical powers.~

Thanks! I certainly hope I can find the time after NaNoWriMo!

[deird1]

Yay! Fun.

[penny_lane_42]

Thanks!

:D

[gryfndor_godess]

Yay, I've been refreshing my friends page for ages waiting for your post, and it was totally worth it! You capture Spike's terror and Buffy's hope so well and believably. I like how she's enthralled with the idea of being able to create life for once, and it's nice to see her happier and more confident in their life and relationship after "Infinatas" (if I'm remembering that fic correctly- it's been a while).

She sighs into the kiss, letting him deepen it, the familiarity of his mouth and tongue, his taste and scent, his Spikenesslighting a fire that burns much less flashy but much deeper than the one he stoked in her when she hated him and herself and she reveled in him because he was taboo.

Absolutely beautiful. I look forward to reading more of this story if you do continue it! :)

[angearia]

In all the rush, I didn't properly express all the things I loved, but your muse was on fire with the penguin comparisons. Just brilliant!

And the quiet moments between them are so lovely and perfect. Just wonderful. ♥

YAY!

[snickfic]

Hon, this is miles better than the last draft I saw. Yay for Emmie and sparkling dialogue! (The tagline, especially.) And the sort of making the gender-flipping more organic. Everything is snappier now. And more concrete! With the descriptions of Buffy's experiences with kids, and all.

But my favorite bits are near the end, where Spike and Buffy come to an agreement that, yes, they're going to do this. Especially here:

“You want to do this, don’t you?”

Her voice is as soft as his when she answers him, hope exquisite as pain blooming in her heart. “I think maybe I do.”

You ROCK.

Few typos:
apoclypses every spring, - apocolypses

But this is…it’s different somehow.” - needs beginning quote marks.

His nostrils flar. - flare

Some parasite's squirmed it's way inside - its

God knows I don’t belong there. I was part of the Scourge of Europe! Slaughtered thousands of innocents! I dunk my pancakes in blood, for god’s sake - decide whether or not you're going to capitalize God

Spikenesslighting - need a space there

[diamondtook862]

Ummmmm apocalypses. :/

[snickfic]

Yes. That. I knew there was another vowel in there! Which I think means there's an "apocolypse" running amok somewhere in the fic, too.

This is why one should always have more than one beta... *g*

[angearia]

Haha, we were all over the place with story arc and voice-beta'ing. We didn't really get to the 'clean grammar/spellcheck' beta'ing. Story comes first. The rest is just polish. :D

Also, I totally agree with how lovely the end Spike/Buffy moments are. So, so lovely. Those are my favorite bits of hers.