Title: Redeeming Eden Length: Chaptered Rating: PG and growing Pairings: YooSu, JaeHo, MinOther Summary: Love, Hatred, Gratitude, Revenge. Is love worth all the pain they have to go through? ( Eden Prologue )
hm, why shall we 'thrash' you? this looks interesting and mysterious, i'm sure it's worth sticking around to watch the story unfold. a little question about the pov, though. it looks like 3rd person limited one moment, and then- 3rd person omniscient- the next. do you want to show everyone's thoughts and feelings and show them from outside, too, or are you planning on showing just one character's inner world and change them from chapter to chapter? oh, and This state of sadness clearly shows the surge of emotions resulting from knowing his brother's misery- is this a thought, too? cause you only changed the tense once before this, in a thought. it's a bit confusing ;)
all in all, i'm curious. please continue- and thanks for sharing ^^
Everything's going to be 3rd person. I'm not going to do character pov for this fic. Not experienced enough(in writing) to do that yet, worried that things will get confused(or I might confuse myself). Will be telling from outside with characters having thoughts in italics.
Wow, you're sharp! Oops! Missed one. Must have spaced out for that sentence.
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oh, and This state of sadness clearly shows the surge of emotions resulting from knowing his brother's misery- is this a thought, too? cause you only changed the tense once before this, in a thought. it's a bit confusing ;)
all in all, i'm curious. please continue-
and thanks for sharing ^^
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Will be telling from outside with characters having thoughts in italics.
Wow, you're sharp! Oops! Missed one. Must have spaced out for that sentence.
Anyway, thanks for reading and pointing it out!
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Because this seems really interesting!
I'm intrigued!
Really I am!
Please continue!
And. . .MERRY CHRISTMAS!
X3!
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Will continue to post and reveal.
Merry Christmas to you too!
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it's mysterious..and angsty.
I really wanna know who's who[m]
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Will be revealing the identities through the chapters.
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im still guessing who's whow in the prologue
please continue ^^
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The following chapters will reveal the character's identities.
Cheers!
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I wonder what the BIG plan is o.O
ah...update soon!! lols...sounds realli interesting :D
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Glad that you like this.
Cheers!
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