Falling into a character's mindset
I don't know about other writers (not that I really consider myself as a writer), but I sometimes find myself feeling 'trapped' in a character's mind. Their feelings become yours and its hard to shake off. Just like actors preparing and acting emotional scenes I guess.
I was attempting to write a fic that I have planned and found myself producing this instead. I haven't written poetry in ages, so please, I would really welcome some input in this. I really struggled to find the right words in some places to convey what I felt, and so am not sure if all of it makes sense but I really didn't want to continue with it. Also, it would be nice to know if the rhythm is ok, because obviously in my own mind, I know the tempo/speed of how it is read.
The Final Release (not sure about this title either)
Pain received weakens the body,
Through fists and kicks, in anger or fun.
Objects of flesh and those at hand
Leaves bruises on & under the skin.
Pain continued upsets the mind,
Accusations thrown and blames assigned.
Taunting whispers and shouts of crimes,
Confusion and doubts begin to grow.
Pain accepted destroys the soul,
Freedom denied, sentence established.
Lies become truths, theirs not yours,
No fight, no defence is left to show.
Imprisoned in this repulsive shell
There's one way out, the last escape.
Regain control, regain the strength,
And leave the mire of life this is.
Pain received weakens the body,
Pain continued upsets the mind,
Pain accepted destroys the soul,
Pain inflicted to cease this life.
[Now I just need to find me some PWP or a really funny crack fic to read]
I was attempting to write a fic that I have planned and found myself producing this instead. I haven't written poetry in ages, so please, I would really welcome some input in this. I really struggled to find the right words in some places to convey what I felt, and so am not sure if all of it makes sense but I really didn't want to continue with it. Also, it would be nice to know if the rhythm is ok, because obviously in my own mind, I know the tempo/speed of how it is read.
The Final Release (not sure about this title either)
Pain received weakens the body,
Through fists and kicks, in anger or fun.
Objects of flesh and those at hand
Leaves bruises on & under the skin.
Pain continued upsets the mind,
Accusations thrown and blames assigned.
Taunting whispers and shouts of crimes,
Confusion and doubts begin to grow.
Pain accepted destroys the soul,
Freedom denied, sentence established.
Lies become truths, theirs not yours,
No fight, no defence is left to show.
Imprisoned in this repulsive shell
There's one way out, the last escape.
Regain control, regain the strength,
And leave the mire of life this is.
Pain received weakens the body,
Pain continued upsets the mind,
Pain accepted destroys the soul,
Pain inflicted to cease this life.
[Now I just need to find me some PWP or a really funny crack fic to read]