I wrote a story...

Jul 09, 2004 09:19

Okay...I'm going to pray that my lj cut thing works, cause this is kind of long. Here's a blurb to start you off ( Read more... )

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Exhalted Beauty timuri July 9 2004, 10:52:03 UTC
I think that this is close to the best thing I've ever read of yours. The honesty of it is surreal, and the concept refreshing. I wish to see the models that appear on every magazine, in thier more natural/ugly state. No one is truly that perfect, why do we pretend like they are.

I hope that you continue with this.

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you are a powerful writer... notaboyscout July 9 2004, 22:56:22 UTC
your story blew me away.

I wanted to point out an apparent typo as well, in the last sentence of the sixth paragraph counting the paragraph after exalted beauty as paragraph one, it reads:
He could not look anywhere without the remind of an intimate moment of creation:

I was also unsure if the colon at the end of that sentence was deliberate.

I enjoyed reading your work very much :) Can't wait to read more.

XXXOOO,
Ryan

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