[KHR!]: Slow Burn.

[signifies]

title: Slow Burn.
characters: Chrome, Gokudera. Side appearance of Yamamoto.
rating: PG
wordcount: 1003.
challenge/prompt: khrfest; III-56. Gokudera/Chrome - loyalty.
disclaimer: This story is based on characters and situations created and owned by their respective author. No money is being made from this fanwork and no copyright or trademark infringement

Comments

[ibuberu]

I love the time factor in this, not only does it keep the flow of the story, it's really a good show of how efficient everything is in the Family, how every minute counts. (also, should the last part be 12.00am and not pm?) I kind of like the relationship you've crafted between Chrome and Gokudera, a little mysterious but with Gokudera hoping that he can trust her at the end, which I think is the sweetest thing that could come from a character like him (:

"The entire night, she was with me." ffff my favourite line, in fact one of my favourites in quite awhile. I find that it does wonders despite how simple it sounds, that's an amazing thing you did with the words there.

The only thing I didn't get is what the last line meant though! ;;

[signifies]

Thank you very much for this comment! I'm so glad you liked it. And yes, silly me, it's supposed to be 12:AM I'll go and fix that right away C:

ACJAKFJ THAT LAST LINE WAS just a mistake lmfaokajs i was copying and pasting different fics all over the place and uh, that happened. That one for another of my fics LMFAO so sorry ;;

[nervousvenus]

I love this. It flows beautifully and I love the way you've written these two, especially Gokudera. The ending is awesome, it's a little bittersweet and it just makes you hope things turn out all right for them, and I love how Gokudera hopes that the things she does are sincere and that he can trust her. It just seemed so Gokudera, for lack of a better word.

In short: Amazing.

[signifies]

Thank you very much! ♥

And yes, it's such a mysterious relationship. He doesn't quite know what to do with her, so he just goes with the flow when it comes down to it, against his better judgment. I imagine that that's something he doesn't do willingly often.

[ezcap1st]

Lovely. There's so much tension in the whole story, and it really intensifies the feelings portrayed here. Really sucks to be Gokudera.

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Thanks so much for the great comment! ♥

[teruame]

Nicely done. :) It gives that portrayal of Gokudera's actual vulnerability and bittersweet sorrow and feeling of longing and loss despite all that he intends. XD So...Gokudera-like. :3 And, the one-liners just kill me greatly.

Keep up with this! :D Chrome and Gokudera is a difficult pairing to write for, and you did it well. :D

[signifies]

Thank you so much! And you're right, there's such a difficult pair to write, romantically or otherwise. This is the first time I've managed the write something coherent about them. I'm glad I did well :)

[deathbysmiles]

That was so good! It mustn't have been easy writing that pair. (Not that I would know) It was sad but nice how he wanted to keep believing that she was innocent, even if he knows she's more likely not. It makes you want to hope a happy ending for them. Beautiful.