[Fic] "The Seduction of Sirius Black"

[sciathan_file]

I don't think I have ever researched as much as I did for this fic - I observed things in London (the James of New Row clock shop is actually real), 70's fashion, touristy pubs in Covent Garden...God knows what else. Experience with Dublin street signs is also authentic

Comments

[duck_or_rabbit]

I really thought you capture all the characters extremely well. The chemistry between Sirius and James reads entirely true. Their exchanges are paced naturally, like two blokes so familiar with the other that much is said by what is left unsaid. This is particularly the case in the wrenching ending. Really nicely done, from beginning to end.

The fight sequence in the first scene is excellent. Writing movement and action is extremely difficult, and the blows are expressed with appropriate detail amounts that keep things interesting without letting me space out. The timing is good in this scene. It seems witin Sirius' nature to possess powerful magic; he has Black magic in his blood, afterall.

The original story you develop is an interesting one; James and Sirius are intellectually capable of handling undercover negotiations for the Order/Ministry, so I fully believe in the plot you chose. Mixing in Marlene is smart, and really drives the story. I've wondered on occasion if she could have been a romantic match for Sirius, and although you don't present it, I may have caught an allusion or two.

The bit at Godric Hallow is great! The chessman are all kinds of cool! Magical details help tell HP stories, and each scene blended magic and charm fluidly in, and I appreciate that you did this.

I could go on, but will stop as to not clog your thread. I really like this, and thanks for sharing it. I cruise LJ for Sirius and glad to have found you!

PS Mind if I friend you?

[sciathan_file]

I don't mind friending at all - especially Sirius fans, since I seem to have a preoccupation with him.

Fight scenes I usually tend to avoid, because they are difficult to write, but I tried experimenting with this one. I wanted to make it fun enough so that people didn't space out, as that's what I tend to do when I read written battles.

As for Marlene, I can totally see her and Sirius having a bit of chemistry. I see him in a romantic relationship that is more...combative. That, and he would need someone that could stand up to him. There is certainly something of that here. <3

Anyways, thank you for your wonderful and detailed comments! I'm very glad you enjoyed so much!