Day Fourteen

[schwarzbrille]

Title: Gloves
Author: schwarzbrille
Prompt(s): Day Fourteen - “a lost woolen glove”
Rating: G
Word Count: 1691
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Comments

[forever__rain]

lol this was adorable, i love how sirius feels all gulity and then makes him new ones,

and i love how remus says that the left and right are on the wrong hands and then sirius tells him its his intinials

[schwarzbrille]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D

[musesfool]

Oh

*cries like a little girl*

[schwarzbrille]

Oh no! *offers tissues* I do hope that's happy crying, not "what a travesty to the English language" crying. ^_^

[musesfool]

Heh. Yes. It was the "I was very moved, you hit one of my bulletproof buttons" kind of crying.

[schwarzbrille]

I'm really glad that I could, even if it did result in the sniffles. ^_^ Thank you so much.

[forgotnsuitcase]

Aw. Poor Remus. It's just like Sirius to not understand the glove's importance. Sirius knitting is just adorable. Again, your writing is amazing- not just the plot and characterization, but I bow down to your word choices. :P

[schwarzbrille]

I wouldn't think Sirius would be one to knit - ever - but I rememberd Molly's self-knitting needles and after a conference with a friend, decided there has to be some sort of charm for that. I find the image of Sirius with a book and a wand, and misbehaving knitting needles and an unravelling scarf to be even more charming than if he were knitting them by hand. ^_^ Oh, Sirius. *pets*

And thank you so much for your kind compliments. I agonize over word choice a lot - there's so many varying connotations that sometimes I get a bit swamped in it. This piece was relatively free of mental-thesaurus-swamp, and I'm thrilled that it worked in that regard as well as others. ^_^ Thank you so much.

[schwarzbrille]

Erg... remembered. Oops.

[nanagose]

That was the perfect little bedtime story! I love that Sirius doesn't recognize the possible sentimental value of gloves at first- even putting aside Sirius's casual attitude about money, can you imagine Mrs. Black sitting down to lovingly knit her son a pair of gloves? It's also super-cute the way Sirius will go to any lengths to fix things for Remus and make him feel better. Awww!

[schwarzbrille]

I hadn't even considered what you said about Mrs. Black knitting, but I completely agree! They come from such entirely different households - it makes for such cool dynamics. :D

I'm glad you liked this, and thanks so much for your comment. ♥

[paulamcg]

I’m afraid I still, after a week has past, haven’t reviewed more fics of yours. I can’t imagine taking part in something like scarvesnhats, writing and posting pieces of fic daily, as even commenting daily is too hard. I’d rather take my time both in writing fiction and in writing reviews. But now I must let you know that I’m still tempted to check out each R/S piece of yours. And that this one really made me cry.

Yes, I actually had tears on my cheeks when Remus explained the importance of the gloves. Sirius’s surprise gift first seemed a bit too incredible, but your explanation - or his explanation, in wonderfully incomplete, sleepy phrases - made it just as realistic as possible in the magical world. You describe everything, including the characters’ non-verbal expressions, in wonderfully vivid detail.

[schwarzbrille]

I'm behind as well - yours is in the queue of fics I need to read, so it will happen, I'm just not sure when yet. But thank you so much - I'm so amazingly flattered by your comments, all the time. I'm touched that I could make you teary and pleased that Sirius' explanation of the knitting worked. At first I thought maybe I was being absurd and out-of-character with him, but I remembered Mrs. Weasley's self-knitting needles and thought there had to be some kind of spell for it, which is a much - MUCH - more Sirius way of handling it than knitting them the Muggle way. And and and - oh, so many ands - I love that you love the descriptions and Sirius' sleep-talk and I love you for leaving these comments for me.

♥

[paulamcg]

(… a week has passed... right?) So I’ll be hopefully looking forward to your comments on a piece of my fiction, but take your time.

Very few fics manage to make me teary, but I must admit that poverty is my obsession in fiction. And you almost make me wish I had made my Remus poor as a child and teenager, too.

Yes, now that I think about, the climax of the fic perhaps stood out so wonderfully because of the vague sleep-talk - its contrast to the earlier detailed descriptions. You leave it for your reader to imagine the details of the knitting. Instead, you offer to us a beautiful detailed image of the boys cuddling - for a reason beyond sexual attraction, unlike in so many R/S fics. I adore every movement and every line of dialogue in the closing scene. However, I can’t help wondering a bit about the perspective. Do you shift to Sirius’s pov only for a few lines (to mention Remus's scarlet cheeks and the acceptance in his touch)?

[schwarzbrille]

It's written primarily from Sirius' point of view, as in earlier sections where he's aware that he won't come back to pick up his History of Magic book or he reflects on the expression he knows Remus will have when he turns around. It switches to Remus' point of view when morning comes, as Sirius is... well. Asleep. There might be some muddled POV at the end which I should probably go back and fix, but that's how it looks to me, in retrospect.

Thank you again for your genuine analysis and thoughts on the piece. :D I love it - really, I do.