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Prompt: Don't Fool with a Phantom (AU)

Oct 23, 2015 18:55

Prompt: Don't Fool with a Phantom
Setting: AU AtS S5
Rating: PG
Words: 430

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creator: spuffy_luvr, medium: fic, setting: a5

Comments 7

quinara October 24 2015, 10:41:33 UTC

Oh, bittersweet!! Buffy coming to find Spike as a ghost is one of my favourite scenarios, and this is such a nice glimpse into that. :)

slaymesoftly October 24 2015, 14:43:21 UTC

Awww - keep wishing, Spike! Love this.

sandy_s October 26 2015, 01:43:30 UTC

Awww...lovely bit of fiction! Thanks for sharing...you sure conveyed a lot in a few words.

red_satin_doll October 27 2015, 12:43:15 UTC

Seconding sandy's comment - you have a way of saying a LOT with so few words:

Buffy shows up within 48 hours, fists clenched (how dare nobody call her right away) and eyes bright and soft and shining.

There is a world of complicated feelings in that tiny sentences - how very right that you mention her hands and her eyes, two of the most important parts of Buffy, the conduits for her emotions when words fail her.

“Spike,” she says when she sees him in the hallway, her voice all breathy and trembly. She moves in for a hug, awkward and unsure, only to realize his plight as she stumbles through him and into the wall. “Spike?”

“Yeah, about that...”

I can see it going exactly this way, down to the little pauses and incomplete sentences. I've read lots of stories with this scenario and yet this is amazingly fresh.

shapinglight October 27 2015, 13:00:44 UTC

Aww!