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cloudedge in savin_me

My First Drabble

Apr 03, 2006 18:53

Fandom: Gundam SEED Destiny
Title: The Rematch
Pairing: Shinn/Cagalli
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I don't own Gundam SEED Destiny or any of its characters
Convention: Italics = Sacarism

Heehee, here's my first drabble :D I can never write things in short... so althought I try to cut it the bare necessity, it's still 754 words long >.Anyway, here's my ( Read more... )

cloud, gundam seed destiny, shinn/cagalli

Comments 9

tenohikari April 4 2006, 00:17:46 UTC

Aaaw ::melts:: that was cute, I could actually picture Cagalli doing her victory dance around Shinn.

cloudedge April 4 2006, 00:32:23 UTC

heehee thx :D yeah the Cagalli here is really cute :D
She's rarely happy whenever I read/write her... so it's a nice change :D and I think that's what Shinn tried to do too :D She's having those rare SEED-Cagalli moment in Destiny

whitelilies22 April 4 2006, 01:23:55 UTC

Nice fic ^^ it's nice to see Cagalli happy after the whole war thing. Just a few things:
"and knowing the other pilot; he does not have..."
Your story's all written in past tense so maybe changing this to 'didn't' might suit it?
she can win if she dodge this,
dodge --> to dodged.

Sorry I'm so picky XD but this is a really good piece of work :D

cloudedge April 4 2006, 14:09:29 UTC

heehee thx :D
I suck at tenses... I really need a beta-reader lol XD
I'll change it now :D

and yup yup, writing this fic puts a smile in me :D ShinnCaga usually does that :D Shinn does seem to me to be the kind of guy that would go out of the way to spoil Cagalli :D

angrycherokee April 4 2006, 01:27:54 UTC

Aww, he made it easier for her to win :P
So cute because you can actually imagine this happening later after Destiny.

You should write more. I really liked this :D

cloudedge April 4 2006, 14:14:01 UTC

heehee yes he did XD and because he probably would still beat Cagalli just out of pure reflex... he went all the way to hack the program so it's less obvious XDDDD
Even still, it took Cagalli five tries, and Shinn actually manage to deal quite some damage on a Zaku lol XD

Heehee I will try, maybe I'll write a few more random fluff so I can post this on FF.NET lol

cloudedge April 4 2006, 14:16:29 UTC

p.s. is my Kira and Shinn a bit OOC?
I always find Kira and Shinn's interaction to be very interesting~

craze_izumi April 6 2006, 03:48:43 UTC

This is so cute and sweet...

cloudedge April 6 2006, 06:43:21 UTC

heehee thx :D <3 Shinn is really sweet here XD