Wizard, Waiter, Brother, Spy (T/PG-13) 1/2
TITLE: Wizard, Waiter, Brother, Spy
RATING/CONTENT: T/PG-13 (and only just) for references to consensual, slightly underage sibcest, and mild cursing. Established Jalex, from Max's POV.
WORD COUNT: Approx. 18K in two parts
DISCLAIMER: Would you believe that I don't own Wizards of Waverly Place or its characters? Shocking, I know. I also don't ( Read more... )
RATING/CONTENT: T/PG-13 (and only just) for references to consensual, slightly underage sibcest, and mild cursing. Established Jalex, from Max's POV.
WORD COUNT: Approx. 18K in two parts
DISCLAIMER: Would you believe that I don't own Wizards of Waverly Place or its characters? Shocking, I know. I also don't ( Read more... )
Okay, this is one of the best harebrained schemes Max has EVER done in a fanfic. It is so incredibly Max. I have to simply stare in wonder and appreciation of Max Russo being like this...
Hm, hopefully you actually read these. I know you're mostly an LJer, so I'm not sure. Mind RSVPing when you see this?
You know what? There are too many pop culture references in your fics. It doesn't fit with WOWP very well. It has its own value, but I just don't see them doing it constantly like this.
Harper's at Zeke's family reunion? Something tells me that I REALLY want to see that B-Plot.
(And if Jerry didn't know his kids better, he'd swear that a kind of amused, knowing look passed between them for a split second, like they were sharing some sort of inside joke.)
That one took it a bit too far. Not subtle enough.
Jerry has a mission for Max? Well done scene, though a little too far on the wrong side of "show don't tell" for Max.
("No, they've always done that,")
So very true.
The theories are all rather plausible, with the exception of Max's.
("Whatever it is Justin and Alex are hiding, you'll know it by Monday.")
Alright, what could it possibly be?
Hm, you know I think you have some of the best premises I've seen in WOWP fanfic in a while. So much is just "Justin and Alex moments" and stuff, but you have some definitely plots to them, and they tend to get creative.
Sticking with the whole "review until I'm done" thing, and hopefully I will get more than half a review box full this time.
Chapter Two opens PERFECTLY again.
That is an AWESOME parody of video games right there. I am impressed. And poor Maxie is taking it so seriously too.
("Alfred moved away last month.")
I feel really sorry for Max. I mean, come on, he was really looking forward to it! It sounded like exactly his kind of thing.
("Mom, dad...backyard, rickety fire escape...tomato, tomahto, hahahaha!" Alex laughed, waving her hand as if to brush off such petty details as she stalked towards him. "The point is, you're going to South Dakota, you're going to have a great time, and you're absolutely not coming back until Monday. Call us when you get there, say hi to Al for us, have a safe trip, BYE!")
Alex's plan has some SERIOUS holes in it...
Come to think of it Alfred probably needs an experience like this right now, or at least a friend.
Alright, the whole scene is PERFECT for Wizards of Waverly Place.
(OHMIGOD MAX WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE?)
If Jalex ever actually came to the show, than this is how it would happen.
("Oh right, spy. Can you guys do the last five minutes over again? I forgot to pay attention.")
He saw EVERYTHING he needed to and he still doesn't...
Max Russo in the flesh.
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Alright, I like Max PoV, so here we go.
Okay, this is one of the best harebrained schemes Max has EVER done in a fanfic. It is so incredibly Max. I have to simply stare in wonder and appreciation of Max Russo being like this...
Hm, hopefully you actually read these. I know you're mostly an LJer, so I'm not sure. Mind RSVPing when you see this?
You know what? There are too many pop culture references in your fics. It doesn't fit with WOWP very well. It has its own value, but I just don't see them doing it constantly like this.
Harper's at Zeke's family reunion? Something tells me that I REALLY want to see that B-Plot.
(And if Jerry didn't know his kids better, he'd swear that a kind of amused, knowing look passed between them for a split second, like they were sharing some sort of inside joke.)
That one took it a bit too far. Not subtle enough.
Jerry has a mission for Max? Well done scene, though a little too far on the wrong side of "show don't tell" for Max.
("No, they've always done that,")
So very true.
The theories are all rather plausible, with the exception of Max's.
("Whatever it is Justin and Alex are hiding, you'll know it by Monday.")
Alright, what could it possibly be?
Hm, you know I think you have some of the best premises I've seen in WOWP fanfic in a while. So much is just "Justin and Alex moments" and stuff, but you have some definitely plots to them, and they tend to get creative.
Sticking with the whole "review until I'm done" thing, and hopefully I will get more than half a review box full this time.
Chapter Two opens PERFECTLY again.
That is an AWESOME parody of video games right there. I am impressed. And poor Maxie is taking it so seriously too.
("Alfred moved away last month.")
I feel really sorry for Max. I mean, come on, he was really looking forward to it! It sounded like exactly his kind of thing.
("Mom, dad...backyard, rickety fire escape...tomato, tomahto, hahahaha!" Alex laughed, waving her hand as if to brush off such petty details as she stalked towards him. "The point is, you're going to South Dakota, you're going to have a great time, and you're absolutely not coming back until Monday. Call us when you get there, say hi to Al for us, have a safe trip, BYE!")
Alex's plan has some SERIOUS holes in it...
Come to think of it Alfred probably needs an experience like this right now, or at least a friend.
Alright, the whole scene is PERFECT for Wizards of Waverly Place.
(OHMIGOD MAX WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE?)
If Jalex ever actually came to the show, than this is how it would happen.
("Oh right, spy. Can you guys do the last five minutes over again? I forgot to pay attention.")
He saw EVERYTHING he needed to and he still doesn't...
Max Russo in the flesh.
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