[FIC] Avenger's Choice 1/10
Hi everyone! So I'm kind of new around here, and a sasunaru fic virgin, but this idea had been bugging me for a while, and like any good writer and yaoi fangirl I decided it was time to get it down, so this it... my first Naruto multi-part fic. Which I have cross posted at
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To be a Sasu/Naru virgin this fic is amazingly IC. I think you've got their relationship pretty much down-pat; the way their relationship suffers because they can't *say* how they feel even though they obviously care for each other - I mean, Sasuke crawling toward Naruto to get to him even though he was at the point of death definitely shows that he cares about Naruto more than he'd like to admit. As for Naruto... he's a little better but he's still a guy, and just as stubborn as Sasuke. *shakes head*
The hints at Neji/Naruto were great, too - I liked the scene when Neji finds them in the woods where Neji just stares at Naruto until it makes him uncomfortable. Soo like Neji, lol. And I can definitely see Sasuke being jealous of him... especially since Neji'd steal Naruto away if he had half a chance. It's sweet too how Naruto obviously feels a little uncomfortable around Neji but won't avoid him since he knows Neji really cares about him... even if it's more than he should. I can't wait to see more of the back-story with those two.
The action scenes were well-done, too; I liked the way you described Sasuke's developing MS, and the bit with the clones helping Naruto lug Sasuke and his stuff through the woods.
Can't wait for more!
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As for the MS I like when a reader just knows somehting without being beaten over the head with it... (and then Sasuke got the MS and killed Itachi) so I'm glad it was affective... love ya babe
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