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Up In The Stars - Prompt 6 - Chloe/Oliver - M

Aug 10, 2008 22:16

Title: Up In The Stars
Rating: M
Genre: Angst/Romance/Family
Pairing: Chloe/Oliver
Prompt: #6 - Alone
Table: Found HERE.
Word Count: 1, 683
Summary: He couldn't take it.

Prompts: #1 - Blood, #2 - Passion, #3 - Why, #4 - Nerves, #5 - Gift,
( Up In The Stars... )

author: sarcastic_fina, ship: chloe/oliver, fic: up in the stars, 10_prompts

Comments 17

svgurl August 11 2008, 05:47:24 UTC

Oh, that was heartbreaking. Chloe's dead! :( Poor Ollie ... and poor Hannah.

I really liked the flashback ... that was cute.

She rolled over, arm lifting to wrap around his neck. "Do you think that means I'm yours?" she wondered softly. "Marked from birth." She smiled. "Fate."

"I don't know." He leaned down, pressing his lips to hers in a long, drawn out kiss. When they parted, they were both breathless with half-lidded eyes, glazed with passion. "But I'm keeping you anyway."

Aww ... that was sweet.

You're really good with the emotions. I could totally feel Oliver's pain.

Great work!

sarcastic_fina August 11 2008, 05:55:03 UTC

Thanks! :)

I almost hate writing them like this. I got all teary eyed at Hannah's part. Sometimes though, it just flows really nicely and despite never wanting Chloe or Oliver to die - it made for a good read... Sad as it was.

I figure the emotions are what really make the story a lot of the time. So I tried really hard here - I was a little worried I went overboard with Oliver. But it's only been three days since he lost his wife, so I hope it was realistic! :)

I always love reading your reviews for these! :)

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sarcastic_fina August 13 2008, 05:24:17 UTC

Thanks! My first jump back into Chlollie and I've written two really sad ones! Thankfully, I've written some more happy Chlollie and they'll be coming out soon!

angelbsb August 11 2008, 11:41:48 UTC

omg im am crying that was so sad .

sarcastic_fina August 13 2008, 05:24:34 UTC

I got all choked up while writing so I'm glad that resonated through the story!

Conflicted... cold_queen_5 August 11 2008, 17:19:19 UTC

Here I am, enjoying some nice Chlollie...when who do I spy, but Dean Winchester staring through my soul at your emoticon...

*flails*

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sarcastic_fina August 13 2008, 05:25:13 UTC

-hands over tissue- I cried writing it! -sniffs-
Thanks! Glad you liked it. Happier Chlollie to come! Promise! :)