Final Draft... hopefully...
“I am only one; but still I am one. I cannot do everything; but still I can do something. And because I cannot do everything; I will not refuse to do the something that I can do.” - E. E. Hale. In my eyes, the worst feeling in the world is to be helpless. To lack the ability to fix something or someone, when it is needed, leaves me feeling
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Overall, it's written well. It's sounds intelligent and it is palatable, but there are a few small grammar errors here and there:
"(actually, I think it’s somewhat exciting now)" I feel like this included statement is a little ambiguous and breaks the flow of the sentence.
"..and that although the class work would be difficult the end result would make it all worthwhile."
Add a comma after "that" and one after "difficult". Also, you might consider making classwork one word.
"I became a part of the nursing team as and aide" ..and aide
"We may not be able to save every patient and we may not even be able to please every patient; but there will always be at least one face that you put a smile on during the shift."
You might benefit by combining the first two statements into "we may not be able to save or even please every patient" Also, drop the semi-colon, and replace it with a comma.
That's all I have! Hopefully it's not too late..
Kilmer
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