Comments | sara_merry99: Fic: Aguas Profundas (Sentinel, Gen, R) (Part 2 of 2)

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Fic: Aguas Profundas (Sentinel, Gen, R) (Part 2 of 2)

Feb 01, 2007 09:50

Title: Aguas Profundas
Author: Sara

For disclaimers and ratings and thanks to the village that helped raise this child, please see part 1.

If you missed it, part one is here.

( Aguas Profundas, part 2 )

sentinel, story

Comments 35

sassyinkpen February 1 2007, 18:08:23 UTC

OH man...I love this story so much!! It's just incredibly brilliant :) I'm just very deeply impressed with the pacing of the thing, and the way you used the visions and the blurred lines of reality through the whole story...it was amazing and so well done that I could see and hear and smell everything. Nice, nice work!

sara_merry99 February 2 2007, 03:15:54 UTC

I'm so glad you like it!

::bounces::

Your comments were so incredibly helpful!

janedavitt February 1 2007, 18:36:20 UTC

That was just so terrifying and yet so right, too. Because there's always a price and we didn't see them pay it, not really, for what they got when Jim saved Blair.

Wonderfully imagined and so compelling; this one's going to stick in my mind for a long time.

sara_merry99 February 2 2007, 03:25:01 UTC

Thanks so much for your comments.

I tend to get too close to my own writing, or too distant, so I wasn't actually sure if it would be scary to anyone else. I guess I'm glad to know it is. :)

kitty_poker1 February 1 2007, 19:48:36 UTC

This was mesmerising. The language and imagery, the surreal quality grabbed me from the beginning and never let go. It showed the best of them: Jim's determination to never let go and Blair's deceptive strength. Really excellent work.

sara_merry99 February 2 2007, 03:43:12 UTC

Oh, thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it and so glad you commented.

And I'm glad Blair's strength came through--He was so sick and worn through the whole thing he didn't have a lot of strength to give. I was afraid that he was going to come off as a big wimp.

snailbones February 1 2007, 20:26:16 UTC

Oh wow - just... wow.

I love it; it's wonderful, intense and scary and such beautiful imagery...

I'm going to have to sit up late tonight so I can read it all over again. :~D

sara_merry99 February 2 2007, 03:45:37 UTC

Thanks so much!! I'm glad you found it intense and scary.

(Enjoy reading it again late at night. :D)

weggsley February 1 2007, 22:37:19 UTC

Oh my goodness, this is powerful stuff. Totally engrossing, and with such a sense of constant threat. I am still reeling. Wow, thank you for an amazing piece of work :-)

sara_merry99 February 2 2007, 03:46:33 UTC

Oh, thanks so much for commenting! I'm *so* glad you liked it.