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[sapporonoodles]

Comments

[ohsiriusly]

What's awesome is that I can hear a melody. I wonder if it's close to what it really is.

I love "mimicking applause, colorful kickshaws" so much.

[masae]

I really love "blood pumping through your veins again / but it hurts where there's a phantom weight/ in your heart from the hole/ left from where he used to be..." It's great, vivid imagery.

Umm.... Suggestion: I would change the "within destruction" from the chorus, or maybe put it someplace else if you still want the concept. For me it disrupted the thought of "the novelty of romance". It wasn't completely out of place, but I had to read it twice.

I wanna hear what it sounds like!!!!!!!

[cosmicdancer]

I really like it. Plz to be recording soon!