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sapphire_child

The Deep Breath Before the Plunge

May 05, 2008 22:44

Title: The Deep Breath Before the Plunge
Genre: pointless angsting internal monologue. GO ME.
Rating: PG
Characters: Charlie, mentions of Claire, Aaron and Desmond
Summary: Charlie’s thoughts in the outrigger before he jumps into the ocean in Greatest Hits.
Disclaimer: Not mine not mine not mine.

( I would lay down my life for you... )

Comments 25

dustyirish2003 May 5 2008, 18:03:14 UTC

Wow. That came extremely close to making me cry. Especially the way Charlie's thinking about Aaron ... lovely and heartbreaking.

Sometimes I wonder if I actually love Aaron more than I’ve ever loved Claire.

I suspect this is much closer to the truth than Charlie would like to admit. Fabulous line.

Thank you for writing this. : )

sapphire_child May 6 2008, 03:58:55 UTC

I tend to make a lot of people cry with my fic =S maybe I should write more fluff lol.

Thank you dusty for r/ring. I'm glad you enjoyed this =)

dustyirish2003 May 6 2008, 04:24:33 UTC

I tend to make a lot of people cry with my fic =S maybe I should write more fluff lol.

Nah, I wouldn't change a thing about your writing, it's perfect ... and there's nothing I love more than a good cry! : )

Thank you dusty for r/ring. I'm glad you enjoyed this =)

I certainly did, and you're very, very welcome. : )

littletons May 5 2008, 19:02:09 UTC

This was just..brilliant! You did such a fantastic job capturing Charlie's emotions, and it almost made me cry. (I used to be summerrrain but I haven't commented on your stuff in a really long time!) But I just adore your work and this was just heartbreaking. It makes me miss Charlie even more. Thank you so much for writing this beautiful fic and well done!

sapphire_child May 6 2008, 04:01:07 UTC

Well hello there! I do remember you commenting on my stuff before, it's lovely to hear from you again and thanks so much for reviewing!

^___^

mrslinus17 May 5 2008, 19:06:48 UTC

Gorgeous writing.

sapphire_child May 6 2008, 04:02:55 UTC

*bows*

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sapphire_child May 6 2008, 04:06:54 UTC

Oh, you're back with a vengeance aren't you?

XD

Does that about answer your question? Heee. I've been on tenterhooks waiting for my net to come back so that I could post this gorram thing and send through Cappy's mega-angst-bunny of doom fic.

I still say Claire didn't deserve it, and Aaron deserved a father maybe just a little more than a rescue.

Amen but who are we to mess with the almighty team of Darlton? Screw them anyway. We write a million times better.

pendora_lass May 5 2008, 20:18:12 UTC

I was determined not cry reading this, and yet, here I go again. Very bittersweet this one, Ell. I especially like this line:

It seems ironic - in the bitterest sense of the word - that I should finally have a family, fall head over heels for them and then have to give it all up again so that I can save them.

I think that's how a lot of us fans felt as well. Just when it seemed that C/C/A were finally coming together and COULD be a family, they were torn apart.

I really like the way you wrote the last paragraph, as well. It's nice to remember that moment in the episode and envision your take on what exactly Charlie was thinking/seeing at that moment.

Great work as usual!

pendora_lass May 5 2008, 20:19:35 UTC

*determined not TO cry

sapphire_child May 6 2008, 04:13:41 UTC

I think that's how a lot of us fans felt as well. Just when it seemed that C/C/A were finally coming together and COULD be a family, they were torn apart.

There are honestly no words for that betrayal. For those of us who stuck it out with these two from the beginning, to see him ripped away from everything he'd ever wanted...it was just heartbreaking. Oh Charlie...

Thank you lovely