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worblehat December 4 2008, 23:33:19 UTC
Atobe, sitting amidst his teammates, one leg crossed aristocratically over the other, raised a carefully-tended eyebrow. "As had I, Mizuki-kun. But one gets used to disappointment."

Ahahahahahahahahahah, I loved this line.

"You’d do Yuuta’s whole family if they’d let you."

Oh man, he probably would.

"Are you still upset that I wouldn’t play you yesterday?" Atobe continued, stroking the inside of Mizuki’s wrist with his thumb. "Are you really such a sore loser before you even lose?"

Hahahaha! The dialog really is great here.

An awesome fic! I loved the interactions and Atobe and Mizuki failing and your descriptions were just enough to be vivid. Really, great job!

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penombrelilas December 5 2008, 03:43:10 UTC
Oh, I love this! The interaction between them was adorable, especially Mizuki grabbing Atsushi by the ear or stomping on his fingers.

The start with Yanagisawa was also priceless. I couldn't help grinning the whole time.

"You’d do Yuuta’s whole family if they’d let you."

Haha, I loved this line. So true.

Really, thank you very much for writing this! I loved it. :D

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prillalar December 5 2008, 03:51:10 UTC
"Fuji Shuusuke is my eternal rival," Mizuki sighed, exasperated with Kisarazu’s immaturity. "I do not have a ‘huge boner’ for him."

One million kinds of love for this line.

Fantastic story! I really like the tone and the Trials of Mizuki made me laugh and cry. Atsushi's remarks throughout filled me with joy also.

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longleggedgit December 5 2008, 22:43:22 UTC
"You’d do Yuuta’s whole family if they’d let you." AHAHAH, so true, Kisarazu, so true!

I also loved this: "If you could just jerk off in your room like a normal person, you wouldn’t have had this problem." xD

Very funny! Nice work, anon! ♥

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nivell December 6 2008, 06:24:51 UTC
Mizuki slaps! Aaah..

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