Umm, can I just ask, I spent hours formatting this right, and it hasn't worked on the website. Is something going wrong, or...?
I put the [p] tag (with the right brackets) inbetween every line, and in the bits that had larger gaps between them, like different scenes/paragraphs, etc, I used the p tag repeatedly, and I thought it would have picked it up.
Can anyone check this out, because otherwise the formatting is just... totally wrong, really, and really confusing to read. :(
There was a problem with the p tags. I put up what you had, but it needed closing tags -- and for the lines with extra space, the opening and closing p tags can't be empty. The usual thing to do is enclose a non-breaking space between them, which is what I added here (along with closing tags). If you want a copy of the document back with the tags in it, please let me know. And please take a look to make sure everything came out OK. I compared it to the original document, and it looks right but I want to make sure. I'm sorry I didn't catch it when I posted it!
Also, may I say, mystery author, that this is a most excellent story? I am in awe of the scenes you draw. I think I will not forget the sight of olives in the grass or the different colored houses, or the sounds that both of them make in the throes of passion. Excellent story! :-D
Ah, I'm sorry. I had no idea how the [p] tags worked. I just assumed that it needed to be [p] <- that between every line you wanted extra spaced, and didn't know they had to be closed.
The only thing that's still wrong, apart from a few missed spaces, but it would be too much hassle to do it again I think ^^; is the e-mail exchange. I think the site might not have picked it up, but the bits at the start were meant to have one line on each new line, if that makes sense. In my word document, that extract looked like this:
From: Oshitari Yuushi To: Atobe Keigo Sent: Tuesday, April 03, 2:55 AM Subject: Well.
Ti sarei saltato addosso ieri sera.
- Yuushi.
From: Atobe Keigo To: Oshitari Yuushi Sent: Tuesday April 03, 10:41 AM Subject: Re: Well.
I hate you. You know I don't speak a word of Italian.
If I ask the maid what it means, will I get into trouble?
- Keigo.
From: Oshitari Yuushi To: Atobe Keigo Sent: Tuesday, April 03, 1:50 PM Subject: Re: re: Well.
I said, I'm sorry you're not having a good holiday. ^_^
Oh man, this was filthy indeed, but in such a wonderful way. I really loved how you wrote Hyoutei, so crude and such boys, and Shishido. He really deserves a special mention of his own.
AnonySanta, I really, really don't know what I've done to deserve this, because I'm sure I've been very naughty this year, but maybe that's why I get such a deliciously dirty gift. This was just...absolutely everything I've ever wanted in an exchange fic, and then some, with the boys being boys, and the travelling to Italy and Greece (and after having been to Burano, I have to say that that reference killed me and the description was lovely and it was just like being back there and I felt like Atobe in that I really wanted to join Yuushi there and not just because Yuushi is such a sexy bastard), and the sociopolitical games the Atobe family plays, and the Pride and Prejudice references (oh my god, who are you?!), and Shishido, and Hiyoshi, and Yuushi being shattered by the school finding out one of his conquests faked her orgasm, and the phone sex, and Atobe loving being told off, and seeing them both ruffled, and the dinner table scene (god I shrieked with laughter the whole way through), and the sex, oh - dirty and
( ... )
Some of my favourite lines, though like I said I could quote the whole damn fic at you:
Hiyoshi looked thoughtful. Atobe was nowhere near cool enough to be a spy, and besides, he was way too flashy. He'd be as subtle as a spear through the head.
Hiyoshi thought he would make a fantastic spy. He often hoped someone would pick him up from the gates of Hyotei in a fancy black car, tell him they'd been watching him for months, and he was just the sort of person they needed. Usually, though, it was his mother, and instead, she would wipe his face with a napkin where he was grubby from practice, and that was in no way cool or something the secret service would do.
Oh, Piyo. ♥♥♥
By the tenth day, Atobe was considering acting out a Greek tragedy, perhaps killing his father, and then throwing himself onto jagged rocks; something suitably dramatic. He would have to draw the line at sexual relations with his mother, though, even if Oshitari did keep insisting that if he was twenty years older he would, to which Atobe would scream and
( ... )
"I said that..." Oshitari's voice was shaky. Atobe made a mental note to tell him that he was more charming when he wasn't trying.
Because just. YES. I love that version of Yuushi SO MUCH, and I love that Atobe sees that in him, and I love the way they are together where they can both just be themselves because there are no expectations, and...dfslkgjfdlkgjfd.
I am so, so happy you liked this, truly. I fretted over it for ages, because I have rampant writing insecurity, and wondered if it was not hot enough, too removed from school and tennis, entirely stupid and should be scrapped, etc, etc, etc. My beta is a very tolerant person. XD
The fact you've been to Burano makes it boggingly appropriate, because I had no idea you had. I'd never even heard of the place before I went there, let alone met anyone else who'd been. o.O
I randomly checked your journal today, because originally I'd been going to comment to tell you the formatting was fucked up, and if you'd wanted the original document I would have sent it to you so you could read it that way, but then I saw you'd disabled anonymous commenting and gave up. When I was there, however, I saw that you'd been ill today. Being ill myself right now, and the Xmas before that, I sympathise, and I hope this goes some way to make you feel a little better. I loved writing it. ♥
I am most definitely going to read this again and again and again, because it was positively deliciously brilliant! =D Oshitari and Atobe have, over the year, become one of my favourite pairings - and you have totally done them justice, because this fic is hot and sexy and I adore the snarky dialogue between them, which just seems so right.
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I put the [p] tag (with the right brackets) inbetween every line, and in the bits that had larger gaps between them, like different scenes/paragraphs, etc, I used the p tag repeatedly, and I thought it would have picked it up.
Can anyone check this out, because otherwise the formatting is just... totally wrong, really, and really confusing to read. :(
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Also, may I say, mystery author, that this is a most excellent story? I am in awe of the scenes you draw. I think I will not forget the sight of olives in the grass or the different colored houses, or the sounds that both of them make in the throes of passion. Excellent story! :-D
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The only thing that's still wrong, apart from a few missed spaces, but it would be too much hassle to do it again I think ^^; is the e-mail exchange. I think the site might not have picked it up, but the bits at the start were meant to have one line on each new line, if that makes sense. In my word document, that extract looked like this:
From: Oshitari Yuushi
To: Atobe Keigo
Sent: Tuesday, April 03, 2:55 AM
Subject: Well.
Ti sarei saltato addosso ieri sera.
- Yuushi.
From: Atobe Keigo
To: Oshitari Yuushi
Sent: Tuesday April 03, 10:41 AM
Subject: Re: Well.
I hate you. You know I don't speak a word of Italian.
If I ask the maid what it means, will I get into trouble?
- Keigo.
From: Oshitari Yuushi
To: Atobe Keigo
Sent: Tuesday, April 03, 1:50 PM
Subject: Re: re: Well.
I said, I'm sorry you're not having a good holiday. ^_^
- Yuushi.
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anjenue is lucky, lucky!
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AnonySanta, I really, really don't know what I've done to deserve this, because I'm sure I've been very naughty this year, but maybe that's why I get such a deliciously dirty gift. This was just...absolutely everything I've ever wanted in an exchange fic, and then some, with the boys being boys, and the travelling to Italy and Greece (and after having been to Burano, I have to say that that reference killed me and the description was lovely and it was just like being back there and I felt like Atobe in that I really wanted to join Yuushi there and not just because Yuushi is such a sexy bastard), and the sociopolitical games the Atobe family plays, and the Pride and Prejudice references (oh my god, who are you?!), and Shishido, and Hiyoshi, and Yuushi being shattered by the school finding out one of his conquests faked her orgasm, and the phone sex, and Atobe loving being told off, and seeing them both ruffled, and the dinner table scene (god I shrieked with laughter the whole way through), and the sex, oh - dirty and ( ... )
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Hiyoshi looked thoughtful. Atobe was nowhere near cool enough to be a spy, and besides, he was way too flashy. He'd be as subtle as a spear through the head.
Hiyoshi thought he would make a fantastic spy. He often hoped someone would pick him up from the gates of Hyotei in a fancy black car, tell him they'd been watching him for months, and he was just the sort of person they needed. Usually, though, it was his mother, and instead, she would wipe his face with a napkin where he was grubby from practice, and that was in no way cool or something the secret service would do.
Oh, Piyo. ♥♥♥
By the tenth day, Atobe was considering acting out a Greek tragedy, perhaps killing his father, and then throwing himself onto jagged rocks; something suitably dramatic. He would have to draw the line at sexual relations with his mother, though, even if Oshitari did keep insisting that if he was twenty years older he would, to which Atobe would scream and ( ... )
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"I said that..." Oshitari's voice was shaky. Atobe made a mental note to tell him that he was more charming when he wasn't trying.
Because just. YES. I love that version of Yuushi SO MUCH, and I love that Atobe sees that in him, and I love the way they are together where they can both just be themselves because there are no expectations, and...dfslkgjfdlkgjfd.
*reads again*
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The fact you've been to Burano makes it boggingly appropriate, because I had no idea you had. I'd never even heard of the place before I went there, let alone met anyone else who'd been. o.O
I randomly checked your journal today, because originally I'd been going to comment to tell you the formatting was fucked up, and if you'd wanted the original document I would have sent it to you so you could read it that way, but then I saw you'd disabled anonymous commenting and gave up. When I was there, however, I saw that you'd been ill today. Being ill myself right now, and the Xmas before that, I sympathise, and I hope this goes some way to make you feel a little better. I loved writing it. ♥
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Thank you so much for writing this! =D
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