A Matter of Time, part 5/10

[sanguefic]

Title: A Matter of Time part 5/10
warnings angst, romance, underage teen sex, references to miscarriage, implied physical abuse to a minor, some mild violence
Rating: nc-17 throughout
Word Count: this part approx 5,600 words (of 65,700)

summary An AU set in the Trek universe which explores a different beginning for Jim and Bones. Leonard

Comments

[lindmere]

Oh, all your voices are so perfect here--you've done so well by poor, heartbroken, Jocelyn, and Spock is marvelous: tart and sarcastic even while he's being helpful. I am enjoying this so much, and full of amazement at how you've not only managed to keep the threads of the plot straight, but created such well-rounded, sympathetic characters as well!

[sangueuk]

Honestly, I'm so thrilled to be getting feedback chapter by chapter like this, thnak you for doing this!

I'm pleased you like my Spock voice. I had less 'help' than I did with Sarek who I found harder - damned vulcans and their strange way of talking - but I adore the whole McCoy and Spock dynamic in TOS (although it sometimes goes too far - see Galileo 7) and I wanted the feel of that here. It appeals to me that they should rub each other the wrong way from the outset!

Keeping the threads even half straight was a headache, as you can imagine, but I'm relieved it even half-worked in that sense - thank you for continuing to stick with it! *hugs*

[savoytruffle]

Every chapter I'm just more and more impressed with how you've woven together so many different threads told from so many different times. It works beautifully and has great emotional impact, just like the book/movie that inspired you.

[sangueuk]

Thank you, sweetie, I'm so relieved!

[sangueuk]

Yeah, this was another intense chapter and I found it hard to write some parts, to get the emotion right and then shake it off. *sends you hugs*

[pslasher]

Poor Joss and Bones! So hard for them. I'm glad it worked so they could have Johanna, but OMG, Bones leaving her! So awful, but also needed. No wonder he's such a mess in that shuttle. You've set it up perfectly. And I too am amazed and so excited with all the different threads you've got going on here. It's so exciting to see it all coming together.

[sangueuk]

This comment makes me so damned happy *twirls* - I'm glad it feels like it's all coming together - I worked pretty hard at that, thank you!

[pslasher]

Well all the hard work payed off. You've got a complicated story here, but it all fits together perfectly like a puzzle.