Jensen has been living on the streets for 10 years? Oh my, how sad. Interesting that Jared calling him Jen triggered a memory after so long. That makes sense, though, since Jensen probably never told many people his name. I’m so glad that not everyone treated Jensen badly and that he has a memory of a blonde haired woman that made him feel safe.
Have to say again how much I like your Misha. He was right in calling out Jared after finding them kissing. Everyone needs a Misha in their life. Although I don’t believe (or maybe hope) that Jensen isn’t mentally ill, he does have a lot going on, what with some issues of memory loss and his speech indicating he’s had some sort of trauma. His capacity for understanding seems genuine. Unfortunately, at this point, Jared is the only one that really gets to see that.
I really liked this part. It shows how much is going on with Jared, how much his life is changing by meeting Jensen:
He met Misha’s questioning gaze and realized that he honestly didn’t know how to answer him. He didn’t know if he wanted to save Jensen or wanted Jensen to save him. And he no longer knew if there was a difference.
I also thought Jared’s awkwardness with Jeff, asking for help, coming clean that Jensen wasn’t family, just a friend, and telling Jeff what he knew about Jensen, was so well written. Jared was putting a lot of trust in Jeff, I think, even though Jeff had shown compassion toward Jensen’s situation when he’d first met them. I’m glad that Jeff agreed to help them.
It was so wonderful reading the part where Jensen pulled his hoodie down himself. Progress! Hooray!
I was also glad to see that Jensen was trying to determine the right order for his words. And also Sandy coming in and being polite with Jensen, disarming Jared (understandably - he has a long history with her, knows that she’s a kind person) and Jared making a choice that didn’t really feel like one at all. Wonderfully written section!
Glad you were able to read a little more. So, yeah, the plot thickens. You *did* point out another favorite part of mine which is when Misha blows up at Jared when he catches them kissing. It seemed very logical to me given what Misha knows/has seen. The assumption that Jensen is most likely mentally ill is where most people would go despite how compassionate they are. It was my intent to show that Jared (or more specifically Jared in relation to Jensen) is different. He sees *more*. It's the theme of the story after all. So he's caught slightly off guard by Misha's anger, even though he's questioned his own actions. I was worried some might not like a side character coming down hard on my hero. But it was so necessary to me.
The next part takes up immediatly after this one. They really are one section in a way. I bring Jared's past relationship to a head with these parts. Hope you like.
Have to say again how much I like your Misha. He was right in calling out Jared after finding them kissing. Everyone needs a Misha in their life. Although I don’t believe (or maybe hope) that Jensen isn’t mentally ill, he does have a lot going on, what with some issues of memory loss and his speech indicating he’s had some sort of trauma. His capacity for understanding seems genuine. Unfortunately, at this point, Jared is the only one that really gets to see that.
I really liked this part. It shows how much is going on with Jared, how much his life is changing by meeting Jensen:
He met Misha’s questioning gaze and realized that he honestly didn’t know how to answer him. He didn’t know if he wanted to save Jensen or wanted Jensen to save him. And he no longer knew if there was a difference.
I also thought Jared’s awkwardness with Jeff, asking for help, coming clean that Jensen wasn’t family, just a friend, and telling Jeff what he knew about Jensen, was so well written. Jared was putting a lot of trust in Jeff, I think, even though Jeff had shown compassion toward Jensen’s situation when he’d first met them. I’m glad that Jeff agreed to help them.
It was so wonderful reading the part where Jensen pulled his hoodie down himself. Progress! Hooray!
I was also glad to see that Jensen was trying to determine the right order for his words. And also Sandy coming in and being polite with Jensen, disarming Jared (understandably - he has a long history with her, knows that she’s a kind person) and Jared making a choice that didn’t really feel like one at all. Wonderfully written section!
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The next part takes up immediatly after this one. They really are one section in a way. I bring Jared's past relationship to a head with these parts. Hope you like.
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