fic posting, the second

[samsom]

Here's the second part. I hope it follows in the same vein as part 1 because I have no plan for this story at all. I stayed up til 5 a.m. writing three pages, got up later in the morning and drank some coffee, read what I wrote, then deleted everything and started over. It's not long, but I got nothin' left right now but the urge to go out and do

Comments

[xlivvielockex]

I never good at giving feedback when the story is as great as yours. You need to give me something to nitpick here. LOL

The characterization is so spot on and I have said it once, I will say it a million times, you have SUCH a skill with language. It paints such a vivid picture. I can see it unfolding in my mind's eye.

I can't wait for the next part.

[samsom]

I wasn't sure the characters were sounding like themselves. I changed Angel's lines about twenty times in a row, so I'm very glad that it came out okay. Thanks, and thanks for saying there's nothing to nitpick. I would love to know if something's not working, so I'm glad someone's looking.:P

[lostakasha]

Oh, man.

Dude.

You decided to end my day on an mazing note? You are something else -- and so is this fic. There's so much to adore here, especially the church!kink, which is sumptuous and raw and gorgeous. I love your language.

“Angel.” She whispers his name because it’s still her safe word... that slayed me. Just slayed me.

And Angel is so tortured and wanton here. Beautiful.

What a day, what a day!

[samsom]

The safe word line was my favorite line & I was so hoping you would notice it, and whee! You did! ::humps yer leg in joy::

Thank you for liking this!

{{{hugs}}}

[starlet2367]

One of the things that gets hard about writing the same characters again and again is keeping them fresh, especially the descriptions of the common elements. For me, describing visions (showing, not telling) became a downright pain in the arse, which is why I always appreciate it when someone does an excellent job of it:

"Then the burn reaches up through the back of her skull and suddenly she is thrown out of her body and into a vision of hell - "

Clean, concise, and beautifully done.

And gyah, what an ending! Can't wait for the next round!

[samsom]

You are one of the best C/A writers out there Kel, and nothing you wrote was repetitius. In fact, if you cared to repeat variations of a theme, let me throw Beacon and Storm Front atcha and you can 'bore' me over and over again. Really. I'd hate that.

But I *love* you.

[damnskippytoo]

*thud* That is all.

Okay, not really. That was scary, dude. And that last line killed me. I hope the next part is needling its way up your spine and into your brain because I need a fic fix!

[samsom]

You have no idea how much it means that you are liking this fic. I know you prefer something lighter so I feel like I'm doing something really right if you are reading it. Thank you and thank you for the icons requests you gallantly fill for me. If there's another one, I promise, it won't be so wordy!:D

[katiesangels]

Woah, I so didn't expect it to go that way. It's getting so dark and dangerous. The thrill is so much there. I love it!

I've wanted to ask you something. Your title, is it Pandora as in Anne Rice's Pandora or just something you liked?

[samsom]

I chose Pandora because when Cordelia opened Angel's sketchbook, she found out something about him and his inner self and what he thinks about her that she can't ever not know. So it's like Pandora - she opened a box and let sin into the world.

I never read Pandora by Anne Rice. I read the Lestat books up until Memnoch -that was the book that stopped holding my attention. And I read the first two books of the Mayfair Witches.

[samsom]

Crap, I forgot to say thank you for liking the fic. This, I think, is the darkest I've ever gone and I'm enjoying myself a lot in between agonizing over it so I'm verra happy you're liking it too. Brace yourself, sweetie, it'll get darker.

[katiesangels]

Then I say thank you for writing. :D

I've only read Pandora from Anne Rice. Wasn't bad but I don't remember that much, so...

Even darker -- can't wait for that.