Sherlock Fanfiction: Fading to Sand

[saki101]

Title: Fading to Sand
Author: Saki101
Genre: slash
Rating: R (this section), NC-17 overall
Length: ~2500 words
Warning: AU, post The Reichenbach Fall
Disclaimer: I don't own BBC's Sherlock and no money is being made.
Author's notes: This is a continuation of the Other Experiments Series which forms an AU frame for the Experiments

Comments

[svetlanacat4]

Things go on...
Love Sherlock caring about John, worrying about " are you ever going to forgive me for what I’ll have done to you? ", and being more and more aware of the love they share beyond all what could happen...

[saki101]

There are so many sides to both of them, but somehow all those differences link together, it seems. Thank you for carrying on with this!

[snailbones]

So many lovely details and nuances - I love the way Sherlock is watching over John, and the way John is sensing him somehow.

Gorgeous gorgeous gorgeous, thank you.

[saki101]

Poor John, if he didn't have that unconscious sense of Sherlock's presence I think it would be very hard for him. (That's a good part of my motivation for the plot in this section. :-D)

Thank you for the sweet words. They always make me happy!

[airynothing]

I love this and I just want to see them back together, breathing each other's scent in.

[saki101]

Thank you so much for commenting! I hate them being apart, too.

[chapbook]

I'm still here and I'm loving this! I was on vacation for a few weeks and am slowly getting back into commenting, until the start of the academic year sucks up more of my time.

John and Sherlock are both suffering; John losing weight is not a positive sign. And Sherlock is right to worry about the limits of John's forgiveness.

I like the scene with Dr. Bertrand; your description makes me wonder about who he is, beyond what he is telling. John's jealousy is an interesting development, not a typical reaction for someone who knew your beloved as a child, but certainly not impossible. I suspect, however, that emotion may be intensified by his bond with Sherlock.

Again, I like the gaps in the story and the flashbacks. The way you structure the story is immensely attractive to me and especially good in this chapter, balancing forward momentum with dispensing information.

[saki101]

A lovely surprise to find your comment today! Hope you had a refreshing holiday before the rigours of the academic year set in

[elmey]

I had commented on the last one, I can't believe it was during June pico! and I remember reading portions of this one during pico as well--the instruments particularly :)

In terms of the writing, I love this:
Sherlock had been standing over a crumpled body, letting his breath settle when he tilted his head to listen. Rain pattered on the tin roof. A train roared past. A chain slithered from a beam, clanked to the floor. Sherlock reached down and slipped a phone from the dead man’s coat pocket.

It's so present and visceral. In terms of the emotions I like the way Sherlock is beginning to understand that sooner or later those regrets will have to be faced, and I like John's constant searching, the thirst for information of any kind about Sherlock, as if the next bit might be the one that will help everything to make sense.

This is a really really good series.

[saki101]

Balm, that's what your comment is. Having one of those periods of doubt and your positive words couldn't have been better timed! (That does not mean that any catastrophes I post in the near future would be your fault. ;))

I see John as an odd mixture of tenacity and exasperation. I imagined Sherlock's apparent absence would temper the exasperation just a bit and enhance the tenacity.

I am thrilled beyond thrilled that you find it a good series so far. The bits I wrote during pico always benefitted from that extra lift of shared endeavour.

:-D

[elmey]

Everyone has periods of doubt--though I hope you don't have too many, you shouldn't! You have a very clear sense of the characters and you convey that really well. And their characters aren't static and are developing in reaction to the circumstances, and you're presenting that with a lot of subtlety. I just really like the way you're able to highlight a moment and make it live.

I assume you're working on the promptfest? Or is that still to come.

[saki101]

I'm probably just indulging in a mood. Also, this latest source of inspiration is rather vague whereas previously something that grabbed my attention did it with a good deal of specificity.

This Sunday is when notifications go out. There's just four weeks between then and the due date and posting starts a few days after that - a fairly brisk timeline.

Buoyed by your supportive words! Prompts avast!