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忍ぶ心 Shinobu Kokoro

Sep 29, 2011 21:34

Title: Part 2: Shinobu Kokoro
Rating: PG13 (mild violence, some sexuality)
Pairing: Jun/Ohno, Sho/Nino
Genre: action, AU
Chapter: thirteen
Disclaimer: I guess Johnny’s technically owns Arashi, huh? Not me.
Summary: Ohno Satoshi is the student of a strong ninja lord who has lived his life following his teacher’s strict guidance. But what happens ( Read more... )

series: ninja, pairing: sho/nino, pairing: jun/ohno

Comments 38

hotaru_schiffer September 29 2011, 13:24:03 UTC

yay.... I'm first... ^^
Oh-chan and Jun will meet Lord Matsumoto...
God, you really did a good job making a cliffhanger....>.<

Please, please made another chapter fast...
You left me too curious...>,

boblemon September 30 2011, 05:36:11 UTC

It's like four cliff hangers in a row, right? >__>; I'm sorry!

Thanks for reading! I'll try to update quickly! :D

lianne29 September 29 2011, 14:24:22 UTC

...so that was why Jun is in prison

I'm curious about the details that didn't make it but I'm not sure what to ask

thank you for this chapter!

boblemon September 30 2011, 05:36:48 UTC

Yep! Some more info will come out in the next chapter, so if it's not there, ask away! Maybe I'll add a few notes at the end for you~

Thanks for reading!

rim1789 September 29 2011, 14:50:40 UTC

I suspected something like that about Jun. Someone using the castle/name in his stead and him being a prisoner. The '' Lord Matsumoto'' had trhown me off, I didn't even think about the possibility that his father 's cousin LET ALONE brother could also be called '' Lord Matsumoto'' * facefloor, because facepalm is not enough*

I'm surprised really, I would have thought MatsuJun would have left, going to his uncle or....Doing something more drastic, as he is a bit of a daredevil, act without thinking first, sometimes. In times like this.

Then again, if he had done something drastic, it would have ended right there. DX

'' You have a hole. In your chest" xD LOL <3 ( ... )

rim1789 September 30 2011, 00:39:37 UTC

I was reading back the chapter ^^ // XD Love your fanfic so much I always read ne chapter twice three times, waiting for the next ///

I feel that I didn't comment enough on the Juntoshi D8

''Nino was repressing a grin at Ohno’s mortified look.'' Haha Aiba xD YES XD He is '' warm'' lol.

I'm glad baby steps are made. OMG XDD Nino '' just push Oh-chan back...''' I 'm sure said person would be happy to hear what you tell his loved one. Or wait. Maybe he really will at some point xDDDD

Riida isn't compleltly stupid, he probably knows what MatsuJun have in mind, coming with him.

“Don’t do anything stupid, okay? ''

============> Don't worry dear for the update * hugs* hope you're better

'' w're halfay through the story.'' THIS MADE ME SO HAPPY 8DDDD! So much more to go !

Continue. //Sorry for my short message, previous one I mean. I was dead tired and on the verge of going to sleep when I saw your update and I couldn't help QBUT READ and review. //

boblemon September 30 2011, 05:47:44 UTC

Wow, I can't believe you read this chapter so many times! I'm sorry for making you wait, lol.

Yep, it was Jun's uncle who did it (I knew it wasn't obvious what the connection was, but I thought people would guess that someone was controlling Jun at least. ^__^; I hope it wasn't confusing or anything!). Hmm, I think you're pretty right about Jun doing something rash, but, although he recovered a little, he's still really dependent on Ohno, so once he started thinking about it he couldn't stop. Good thing Nino and Aiba were there to distract him and keep him from doing anything suspicious, ne?

Juntoshi is going smoothly for now although Ohno was pretty out of it when he woke in the first place, so maybe that was a moment of weakness. But it's not going to get much faster than baby steps, unfortunately. As for what will happen when the others find out about Jun... you'll have to wait! But at least Ohno's going to be there and not let Jun do whatever he thinks he has to in order to make things okay ( ... )

deelovesryo September 29 2011, 17:01:37 UTC

Poor Jun, feeling so guilty, he must to feel terrible thinking he brought such disgrace to the people he loves and helped and loved him and show him he can have a full, meaningful life, hope he notices that he is not the culprit but his evil uncle, he is the first victim here, turning himself to be killed or imprisoned again is not going to help nobody but the said uncle ( ... )

deelovesryo September 29 2011, 17:13:16 UTC

Oh! again just when I post it I notice all my mistakes, sorry, hope you can understand what I mean >_

boblemon September 30 2011, 08:12:15 UTC

Don't worry I understood your comment. XD

Jun's so confused and guilty in this chapter and Ohno's not really there to help him. ): But at least Nino is trying, right?
Actually I really loved the scene you mentioned with Sho getting embarrassed that Nino was kissing him and so upset. He probably didn't know what was happening having just woken up, haha. ^__^ He was probably relieved to see Nino too~ But there hasn't been a lot of affection between them, so this was a good time to show it!

Thanks for reading and your comment, especially about answering my question. I agree that it's hard to do when there are so many male characters... it's hard to use just "he" all the time. Actually when I first wrote this it was in my usual style, and then I edited it before I posted it. It's become easier to work the scenes so they're simple to understand but it's so nice to use something like "the older man" instead you know? Saves some thinking effort...

Did you see the new commercials?! Where are they~?

deelovesryo September 30 2011, 13:31:33 UTC

yuizaki_libra subtituled it in Arashi on and the raws are in ANJ and in Arashi on too, there is also the new commercials of Jun everywhere, he looks so good!

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junmai September 29 2011, 18:25:32 UTC

Hahaha, I knew those two would definitely be interrupted. XD ( ... )

boblemon September 30 2011, 08:21:59 UTC

Because I can't make things too easy, lol. XDXD

In response to your question, it's going to sort of be a part of the plot of the next chapter. Although this is basically Japan, I made it my own in my AU, so a lot of it is idealized and mostly for plot purposes (I apologize, but I'm also too lazy to write something more that doesn't have much to do with Arashi =A=; ). I might include a few notes at the end of the next chapter about it, but if you have any more questions feel free to ask them ( ... )