Comments | sabaceanbabe: BSG fic: To Be Human (pg)

sabaceanbabe

BSG fic: To Be Human (pg)

Sep 20, 2005 16:46

Hey, y'all! This is my nod at the 15minuteficlets crowd. I'd never done one before. This is raw, all but written straight to my LJ and I cheated. It took just under 20 minutes, rather than the requisite 15. So sue me. :P Feedback is especially appreciated on this one, simply because it's so quick and dirty ( Read more... )

my bsg fic, my fic, challenge responses

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muridae_x September 20 2005, 21:25:36 UTC

Ah, I love your fix of the big problem with the way that Sharon "interfaced" with the computers and made the virus rebound upon itself. So much more likely that she has hidden and undetectable transponders that work when there are Cylons within range, or even the humans' computers.

That whole thing with sticking the cable into her wrist made no sense, since clearly if there was anything there to be connected up to a network cable it would have shown up as a Big Clue when they were looking for ways of detecting Cylon from human. I guess it squicked people out nicely though, both in the Galactica crew and amongst the viewers, and that was at least part of the effect they were going for. That it's all about effect is a neat little solution that your story has going for it.

sabaceanbabe September 20 2005, 21:41:56 UTC

Thanks for the feedback, man! :) The cable in the arm thing was one of the biggest holes in the story, for me.

Another is that Helo asked Sharon about her and the Chief before asking her about the Cylon code, which seems a bit OOC for Helo, as far as I'm concerned. There may be a fic forthcoming that deals with that. :P

muridae_x September 20 2005, 22:05:16 UTC

Heh. I look forward to it. It's majorly out of character for Helo, who despite fighting her corner all the way has mostly tried to do it in conjunction with fulfilling his duties as an officer of Galactica and a member of the human race. It's private stuff, and it's non-urgent. It could have waited for another time, especially as he'd have a point to prove about his own professionalism in going to her on Adama's orders to ask about the virus. Digressing onto personal matters isn't the way to go about reassuring the rest of the ship that you've got your priorities straight.

I do have a theory about how to fix that one too, but at the very least I shall save it for when I finally get around to reviewing the episode.

sabaceanbabe September 21 2005, 01:13:41 UTC

Once you've reviewed the ep, I'd *love* to hear your theory...

weissman September 20 2005, 22:13:18 UTC

Hi sabaceanbabe
That was really cool, I liked the touch of the Marines that came to get her being scared of her, that was cool. In the epsiode Grace did such a great job of not playing the victim in that scene, she played it with dignity, and after reading youfic and looking back at the episode Ican enjoy that scene even more.

Bob W-Hooah!

sabaceanbabe September 21 2005, 01:14:47 UTC

Thanks, Bob! I'm glad you enjoyed this and that it'll enhance your enjoyment of FotP even more. :)

Ahhhh koalathebear September 20 2005, 22:13:59 UTC

Oh, yours is so much better than my attempt was.

I really like your take on the CIC scene which has very much been on my mind since seeing the episode. Hope you don't mind if I link from mine to yours ;)

"Whether the humans wanted her here on Galactica or not, Sharon Valerii had come home".

Re: Ahhhh sabaceanbabe September 21 2005, 01:16:24 UTC

Hon, I don't mind if you link to this at all, but I sooooo disagree that mine is better than yours. After all, yours is really what inspired me to look at that comm in the first place and give this whole thing a try.

*hugs you tight*

But, either way, I'm glad you enjoyed this. :)

repr0b8 September 21 2005, 01:23:44 UTC

Great fic, sbabe. It amazes me the quality that you could create in such a small period of time.

The pain in her wrist, the warm blood that dripped to the gray deck, the metallic odor of that blood, all kept Sharon focused on what she had to do, helped her to bite back on her feelings, on her realization that she was finally committing treason for her baby and for the man that she loved.

Wow. The detail and emotion in that paragraph. Beautiful.

sabaceanbabe September 21 2005, 01:42:22 UTC

Hee. Looks like we were reading each other's fics at the same time. :P

Thanks, Jeff. I really appreciate it. I'll even forgive you that you killed Helo. ;)

shadowserenity September 21 2005, 01:43:53 UTC

My God, you wrote that in 20 mins? I only got 200 something words and a weird introspective death and life fic.

This is lovely, sbabe. You're so talented, hon. I love the explanation. Does that mean she could connect to the Galactica's computers in her cell or does she need to *see* the computer and focus on it?

Whether the humans wanted her here on Galactica or not, Sharon Valerii had come home.

Best final line.

sabaceanbabe September 21 2005, 01:54:06 UTC

Aw, thank you, Ams. *hug*

My thought is that there are maybe transponders hidden here and there throughout Galactica and that the one planted in CIC in the mini was meant to be found, to throw them off the "scent" of the others. I doubt there would be any kind of transponder near the brig, because what would be the point? But there is probably one in the officers' quarters and CIC and damage control and places like that. Wherever Boomer might have been so that unnoticed uploads could be performed.