Comments | sa_webster: His life became a valentine

restless_jedi in sa_webster

His life became a valentine

Feb 11, 2007 16:22

fandom: Supernatural
pairing: Dean/Sam
rating: Adult
summary: AU to IMTOD; Dean doesn't have his body back and it's Valentine's Day, but he and Sam make it work anyhow.
title: ( His life became a valentine )

sam/dean, supernatural

Comments 8

ellipsisblack February 12 2007, 01:40:49 UTC

Sam chuckled again, that wild chuckle that meant he still wasn't sure he wasn't gonna cry.

I like this. Lovely detail.

Ok, I'm a little hazy on the logistics of this. My mind is giving my an image of them both still standing, facing (and afaik you haven't told me different), and yet, somehow Dean is guiding himself into Sam. I'm going to need more description of their positioning, because--correct me if I'm wrong--that is anatomically impossible. ^^;

He relished in the sensation of just feeling Sam's skin under his fingertips as he slid down the checked boxers the jeans had hid.

I'd say either "relished" or "revelled in"

AWWW. Hey, unfair to have a V-Day fic that makes me want to cry. :(((( This is lovely, and very good. I don't know if you want to use <3, but just in case you didn't actully know, to get ♥ you need "& hearts ;" minus the spaces. ^^ Might look nicer if you used that?

restless_jedi February 12 2007, 01:53:35 UTC

Sam does laugh like that sometimes.

Okay, the logistics thing is that Dean moved behind him when Sam stumbled after his shirts came off. I wasn't sure if I had to note it, but I added it in now. I don't know about anatomical possibilities...some things are possible that just shouldn't be.

Went with revelled in.

I didn't want it to be all sad, but I had to be true to the facts, and if Dean was incorporeal still after 3 months, these would be the issues. It wouldn't be a very happy holiday for them, though they would fake it. And I went with the heart thingy. I have mixed feelings on it. I don't use <3 either, really. I just was being true to the candy hearts. I'm glad you think it's good and lovely. Thanks for the once-over.

jacey26 February 16 2007, 04:57:23 UTC

That was sad. *whimpers* you broke them kinda.
Beautiful though.

restless_jedi May 22 2007, 17:43:26 UTC

God, talk about slow replying to a comment, but I am glad you liked this. Sometimes...Sometimes the boys are the most beautiful if they're broken.

chavelaprincess June 29 2007, 07:14:58 UTC

Mmmm... *tears* OMG! *tears*

That was good. Sad, definitely sad. But very very good!!!!!!

restless_jedi June 29 2007, 07:50:58 UTC

I've read better angsty incorporeal Wincest, but I'm glad you liked it. I enjoyed writing it.

chavelaprincess June 29 2007, 09:19:17 UTC

LOL! Your honest! LOL! It was angsty enough for me, I am a wimp, I love happy endings, that is as far to angst as I get.

Good story, though.

cherie_morte February 6 2014, 06:52:27 UTC

Aww, this was way sadder than I was prepared for! /o\ Sweet, though, and snarky use of candy hearts? Deefinitely something Dean would do.