Dumbfound
Wow.
I just found out what it would be like if you crossed a yaoi with a Harlequin romance novel. It is bad. Lyrically bad. I'm just going to share one particular line with you that basically sums up everything that is wrong about writing a yaoi in this fashion:
I shot a hot stream of love into his mouth.
Wow. It literally makes your gut clench from the sheer inanity of it, doesn't it? Oh and one other section has these two sentences back to back:
He gave me a long snog. Such a sweet kiss he has.
...I don't think this writer understands what the word snog is trying to convey, and also that the word snog in general doesn't belong in a fiction otherwise reading as though it was lifted verbatum from a dime store romance.
Seriously, half the writers of fanfiction out there need to euthanize their brains already. Just put them out of their misery and let them cross over. Hopefully in the next life they'll be born into someone who can responsible apply their cognative functions.
I just found out what it would be like if you crossed a yaoi with a Harlequin romance novel. It is bad. Lyrically bad. I'm just going to share one particular line with you that basically sums up everything that is wrong about writing a yaoi in this fashion:
I shot a hot stream of love into his mouth.
Wow. It literally makes your gut clench from the sheer inanity of it, doesn't it? Oh and one other section has these two sentences back to back:
He gave me a long snog. Such a sweet kiss he has.
...I don't think this writer understands what the word snog is trying to convey, and also that the word snog in general doesn't belong in a fiction otherwise reading as though it was lifted verbatum from a dime store romance.
Seriously, half the writers of fanfiction out there need to euthanize their brains already. Just put them out of their misery and let them cross over. Hopefully in the next life they'll be born into someone who can responsible apply their cognative functions.