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No Crown of Thorns

Feb 07, 2007 23:23

Title: No Crown of Thorns
Fandom: Post-FFXII
Characters: Larsa, (Penelo)
Rating: G
Format: One-Shot
Status: Complete, polished, spellchecked.
Words: 810
Disclaimer: I don't claim ownership of characters or games, only themes within.
Author's Notes: Cause apparently there just isn't enough Larsa/Penelo love on my flist, I had to write this. Mostly ( Read more... )

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mithrigil February 8 2007, 19:49:00 UTC

I love the distraught craziness of it all. I do not picture him actually speaking aloud to himself to the extent that you convey here, but the sentiment is entirely in tone with his state of mind, and seems very characteristic. I think if you'd held back on his actually talking to himself, it would have more of a punch when he adminishes the "voice of Vayne".

Well-done, though. Eerie.

rustehroll February 8 2007, 20:09:47 UTC

*laughs* Thanks for the feedback. I wasn't sure if the choice for him to speak aloud was right or not, but I wanted to make it distinct he was talking to SOMEONE as opposed to himself.

Often there's insanity that runs in royal houses... wondering if Larsa has a touch of it.... ;)

It's something that should be explored!

mithrigil February 8 2007, 21:03:28 UTC

Oh, he does. I hate to toot my own horn, but have you read my Erlkonig? Or is the Al-Cid thing you dissected the only of my work you've gotten to?

rustehroll February 8 2007, 21:20:40 UTC

Hmm. I haven't really been reading much at ALL lately. I'm just starting to get back into fandom, and reading bits of what people are writing. I'm more partial of shorter works, in the 500 - 3000 word count range, longer than that and it has to have a lot of story pull for me to read it, but if you have something you'd like me to look at, I'll do it. :) I notice most of your stuff is pretty long, but if you wanna pick out your favourite, I'll read it and tell you what I think!! :)

mithrigil February 9 2007, 00:50:11 UTC

You expressed an interest in seeing me use a less flowery style, in a similar situation: I'll point you toward Seams for that--Basch, you'll notice, has a much cleaner style than Al-Cid in a similar situation. It is longer than you expressed interest in, but a good example of what I try to do.

Also, in reference to YOUR fic, read Erlkonig. Because Larsa and happy endings do not mix. ::smiles:: 2300 words.

I figure if you're puttering around, you'll come across the shorter works as well.

Hope you enyoy--and if you want me to recommend other authors, I shall, but I figure you can find your way around.

rustehroll February 9 2007, 01:26:09 UTC

Hmm. Interesting. I'll have a look. I must admit I'm not overly fond of things written in the present tense, because I'm weird like that. I started in on Seams, and left you comment for a bit of clarification before I continue my dissection ;) I just have to sharpen my knives.

At least you're a good sport about letting me cut into your work. This is what I like best about fanfic.. reviewing.

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