Vows

[shayna611]

Pistachio #30. Happily Ever After with a CHERRY
Rating : G
Timeframe : N/A

I know I gave myself a cherry for verse before, but it's seriously the furthest thing from my comfort zone

Comments

[slysionnachnano]

Aw. I like this a lot! Says a lot more than the Christian vows do to me, personally.

Oh, and no "To love and obey," business.

[shayna611]

Thanks :)

do many weddings still use obey? I sure didn't (and I suppose my vows were vaguely Christian - the only part of my wedding that was) and there would have been serious protest from both of us had it even been suggested. In this society, it's just as likely the wife that holds rank as the husband, so who's in charge depends on the couple ;)

[slysionnachnano]

Not very many any longer that I know of. I'm not sure what they changed it to, but I know a lot of women refuse to say that line.

I certainly would.

[kage_ankoku]

Wow. I really liked it. It's just so sweet, and it's well written even if it was out of your comfort zone.

Fantastically done! =D

[shayna611]

Thank you :)

now I just have to come up with the rest of the ceremony so I can write two of them.

[nathskywalker]

My teacher was right. I totally found sexual innuendo in this one ;)

I love the rhythm of this, how every second verse starts with "from this day forth".

[shayna611]

well... it is a wedding, what does one expect them to be doing in their married life?

If you think there's inuendo here, try the actual wedding

The verses are split between the couple - alternating from one to the other.

thanks :)

[nathskywalker]

i've been brainwashed into instinctively looking for sex in poetry. As I said, I'm permanently damaged. I'll check the wedding out later. Need to write or something for a bit. Make my backlog bigger ;)