Comments | runaway_tales: 2 pieces for me today!

shayna611 in runaway_tales

2 pieces for me today!

Mar 26, 2009 10:28

Vanilla #3. Chores
Story : knights
Rating : G
Timeframe : fall 1255
Word Count : 729

I started this for a Cotten Candy prompt, but, darn it, the dishes took over...

( Ski & Lyssa have a little chat )

[author] shayna, [challenge] vanilla

Comments 20

fachefaucheux March 26 2009, 18:17:10 UTC

Heh, last line was killer. XD

I like the view of Lyssa's character you gave in this one. And the Ski and Lyssa interaction only made it better. ^^

shayna611 March 26 2009, 18:33:48 UTC

Thanks :)

I had mixed feelings about it, because it's Lyssa in a rather non-Lyssa-like way. She doesn't often have a whole lot of insight when it comes to her own feelings. But I figure, even she must sometimes get a bit of a clue.

fachefaucheux March 26 2009, 18:41:11 UTC

Yeah, everyone gets thrown a bone once in a while...though it probably not going to last all that long for her, is it? XD

shayna611 March 26 2009, 18:54:55 UTC

nope, she goes right back to pursuing things with typical Lyssa flare and tactic like this and eventually this...

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shayna611 March 26 2009, 20:15:31 UTC

It's a thing with me, I like to keep people's hands busy while they're talking, so they're not just having the conversation in a void.

Thanks :)

sylvrilyn March 26 2009, 23:07:54 UTC

I agree with this, although I sometimes struggle to do it. :)

nathskywalker March 26 2009, 22:08:25 UTC

Ski's disbelief at Lyssa expressing interest in a guy that is more than just sex is just too funny and I guess shocking in a way. I love their dynamic and the conversation. It flows so nicely with the dish washing.

shayna611 March 27 2009, 02:09:06 UTC

Ski knows Lyssa well...or tends to think she does anyway.

Thank you! :)

sylvrilyn March 26 2009, 23:06:51 UTC

Oh, Lyssa! The moment she starts being serious she has to turn it funny again. Nice job with the tension between them.

shayna611 March 27 2009, 02:07:08 UTC

Seems to be a thing with her...and me...

Thanks :)

slysionnachnano March 27 2009, 00:40:27 UTC

Serious Lyssa always makes me grin. I like how she regards her own relationship-thing. And I love the "get my hands on him," bits.

I especially loved the little interludes of how the plate washing is going. Lyssa, you have crumbs!

shayna611 March 27 2009, 02:10:19 UTC

Thank you! :)

Serious Lyssa gives me all sorts of trouble. I had to debate a lot whether half the things that came out of her mouth were actually appropriate.