Chocolate 17, Passionfruit 28 [Divide and Rule]

[lost_spook]

Title: Everything I Own
Author: lost_spook
Story: Heroes of the Revolution (Divide and Rule)
Flavor(s): Chocolate #17 (freedom), Passionfruit #28 (But I have promises to keep, And miles to go before I sleep)
Toppings/Extras: Brownie + Malt - Valentine Box (A thousand lives walk through my own/ I stand still and stand alone - ichthusfish) & Birthday prompt (There really

Comments

[flowsoffire]

♥♥♥ Oh, my babies. This was a really, really moving fic, the strain and tension between them ran so deep and they were just so desperate. Julia’s dilemma was just huge and it kept swelling and swelling in her mind until it just choked her-until she was so obsessed with the wrongness of it all she thought removing herself was the only way out of the equation, the only option that wasn’t selfish. You really showed how it all circled and circled in her head and it was so terrifying, with no way out in sight-and she just couldn’t see anything rationally anymore. I also loved Diana’s presence in all of this-her discreet, respectful, yet steady support was very well portrayed, she was obviously at a loss as to what exactly was wrong with Julia, and did not wish to take sides, to anything that might be disrespectful to Edward or get dragged into their troubles, but she just wanted to be there. The scene with Julia on the beach was just so intense and powerful, her thought process and sheer desperation were perfectly conveyed, the way part of

[lost_spook]

Aw, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)

(And, thanks, have fixed all the errors now!)

[fachefaucheux]

Wonderful piece! You do subtle so well, and it jives especially well with these two. It was very moving...though I have to admit, oftentimes I find Julia's snide comments and Edward's amazing ability to say the wrong thing/something incredibly awkward at all the right (or is it wrong?) time. I have a certain fondness for when characters try and fail to communicate, and you play it out very well. ^^

[lost_spook]

Thank you! :-)

I have to admit, oftentimes I find Julia's snide comments and Edward's amazing ability to say the wrong thing/something incredibly awkward at all the right (or is it wrong?) time.

Heh, I hope the end of that sentence was meant to be 'amusing' or something, and then it's not just me. :lol:

♥

[fachefaucheux]

Ah, of course it's amusing...apparently my mind thought it wrote the last half of the sentence but never did. Teach me to do things after taking a nap. XD You may have noticed I have an extreme weakness to that sort of chemistry in a relationship. ^^