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[shayna611]

Cotton Candy #6. Tinkering with Hot Fudge
Story : knights
Rating : G
Timeframe : 1258
Word Count : 1034

Companion piece to All Bark & No Bite from a few days ago.

Comments

[slysionnachnano]

I know you think this is nothing amazing, but I love Seth in this piece. Seeing him fixing lines and thinking her bouncy step is ridiculous makes me grin.

Shasa though...*shakes head*

Great job!

[shayna611]

She has serious issues, no?

Thanks :)

[slysionnachnano]

Oh yes...

[hi_falootin]

poor, stupid Shasa :O I don't know what you didn't like about this--I really did like the dialogue and thought it worked quite well.

After reading the first piece I was definitely expecting something like this, but it's funny to see Sethan being all nice to her (though deceptive). Even when she couldn't find the squirrel...

[shayna611]

you know, maybe it was that it was so expected that I didn't like it? Like I was just filling in the obvious?

Glad you liked it. Thanks :)

[ichthusfish]

Well that pretty much worked out the way I suspected. You brought it to life brilliantly. Seeing the depth of Sethan's deception was delicious :)

[shayna611]

thanks :)

[kitsuneasika]

This made me grin like mad and love Sethan even more. ♥

[shayna611]

Aww, thanks :)

[bandgeek01]

I like this :)

Nicole

[shayna611]

thank you! :)