Starting Over

[shayna611]

Blueberry Yogurt #10. Across the Miles
Story : knights & necromancers rewrite // ( old stuff here)
Rating : G
Timeframe : Book One
Word Count : ~900

Comments

[roisin_farrell]

Yay! You wrote something! :) I'm so proud of you.

As a beginning, this is excellent. You definitely caught my interest in a) who was knocking at the door and b) what the cat saw.

(And I take it at this point, Rune doesn't know the true nature of the cat).

[shayna611]

Thank you! I'm proud of me too, it was hard to make myself do it!

I'm glad it worked :)

And yes, Rune has no clue about the cat.

[rustydragonfly]

Ahahahaa this is the cat that turns out to be (SPOILER), isn't she?

I bet she's leading Rune on an interesting chase.

[shayna611]

Yes that is the spoiler cat.

Thanks! :)

[rustydragonfly]

Mmmmm... spoiler cat...

[adamleebooks]

I'm curious to see how this develops. You've introduced two mysteries here: one from Rune's perspective, which is who was knocking on the temple door; and one from the reader's perspective, which is what's going on with his magically moving house. It'll be interesting to see if the resolutions to these are linked.

[shayna611]

thanks :)

I never much liked the old beginning. I figured if I was going t start over I'd let things develop a bit more slowly.

[promisesesimorp]

I'm excited to read everything new from the beginning! I was hooked on the old stuff and I'm hooked on this new start too. Very well done!

[shayna611]

Thanks! :)

[skybirdday]

For a title, The Seven. . .Or the Seven Statues?

I like this... how does he end up with the seven
statues?

[shayna611]

Thanks :)

The temple and the statues are going to be important, but they're not really the center of things, though in some ways maybe they are. Rune found his way to them a few years before and they will be making more appearances through the whole series.