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[shayna611]

Milk & Honey #13. Public Display of Affection with Cookie Crumbs
Story : knights & necromancers
Rating : PG
Word Count : 526
Cookie Crumbs : Alternate version of Dancing, though it contradicts the original. I'm not sure which role I prefer for Ski in the matter.

Comments

[fachefaucheux]

...and sometimes it doesn't serve you well to be the last to know. I think I liked this piece best of the lot--Ski's emotions really come through well.

[shayna611]

thanks :) this was the one that made me decide they were worth posting

I'm a little torn though. I read the old one just before I posted. I really like the idea of her deciding to finally take a stand and admit her feelings and pursue something with him, only to have Lyssa swoop in before she has the chance to. But I also like the old version where she basically squashes all that and implies they've got her permission. Of course she's got the next few years to do that anyway.

[ichthusfish]

I think I like Ski in this version, even though she has left things for too long. Somehow, I never really took it that she'd given implied consent in Dancing, more that she was passing silent comment on Lyssa's assurances that she didn't bite.

[shayna611]

thanks :)

I think I'm going to end up working out something between the two.

[hi_falootin]

Hm, I like both versions too! This one is obviously messier which is good ;) But the parallel of the two balls a year apart works quite well here and even in the other version, I can see Ski having these feelings to some extent.

[shayna611]

thanks :)

I think I'm going to try to come up with something between the two. I do like the idea of her deciding to finally take action at just the wrong time.