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3-part Pumpkin Pie

Oct 31, 2011 00:11

Pumpkin Pie #6. Face Paint
Story : There Are No Small Parts
Rating : G Word Count : 499

All 3 pieces make up a continuous story. Follows Cobwebs. I am determined to finish Pumpkin Pie tomorrow!

( Fran has a date )

[challenge] blueberry yogurt, [author] shayna, [challenge] pumpkin pie

Comments 8

hi_falootin October 31 2011, 05:29:02 UTC

This whole thing is delightful. I laughed pretty hard between the 2nd and 3rd pieces because OF COURSE that wasn't going to end well. But hey, Lloyd seems to have a good attitude and now they have a date to remember XD

Fran and Lloyd are pretty darn cute together.

I liked the brief glimpse of Merry (who does seem like quite the diva, but reasonably tolerant) at the beginning. I'm glad you seem to be inspired on this story cause I want to meet the rest of the cast!

shayna611 October 31 2011, 05:40:27 UTC

Thank you! :)

I think Lloyd might be the Kairn of this canon (on a much kinder and more accidental scale). I just can't ever be nice to my characters though, can I? I wanted to have a couple that would be cute and actually good for each other (you know, aside from the klutziness) so hopefully they keep it up.

I don't think Merry sees Fran as a threat, so she might be willing to give her a little room. I'll have to play with her more to figure her out though.

I am so happy for this canon, it is making me want to write again!

CANDY:
This sudden burst of sunlight
And me with my umbrella
"Stray Italian Greyhound" Vienna Teng

roisin_farrell October 31 2011, 18:28:14 UTC

Lloyd and Fran are just so cute together. I so wanted her to hug him in the last piece.

And yay for wanting to write again!

shayna611 October 31 2011, 20:17:41 UTC

Thanks! :)

I don't often do "cute" with couples - it's a fun change!

I so wanted her to hug him in the last piece. See, this is the sort of thinking that keeps getting Kairn into so much trouble ;)

CANDY:
I just stopped believing in happy endings
"Stray Italian Greyhound" Vienna Teng

luna_moonsilver October 31 2011, 19:47:09 UTC

Oh, Fran is so adorable - and so is Lloyd, though it's probably a good thing he warned her not to pack pixie bait for their next date ;D. Fran's nervous chatter is hilarious as well -- ohh, this whole thing was just so cute! :D Might be why I've gone very incoherent, haha.

shayna611 October 31 2011, 20:19:11 UTC

Thank you! :)

The incoherent chatter is somehow making her easy to write, which makes me happy. Hopefully their next date goes a little more smoothly.

CANDY:
These inconvenient fireworks
"Stray Italian Greyhound" Vienna Teng

nathskywalker November 1 2011, 16:53:49 UTC

I think I've said this quite a lot now but not enough. Those two are so adorable and play off each other so well. The conversation with Merry at the beginning set this up perfectly and Lloyd being okay with Fran talking all the time is fun.

shayna611 November 1 2011, 22:02:51 UTC

Thank you! :)

I'm glad you're enjoying them. I'm having a lot of fun writing them. I really do need to get to the rest of the cast too.

CANDY:
This ice-cream-covered screaming hyperactive thought
"Stray Italian Greyhound" Vienna Teng