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bookblather in runaway_tales

Poached Pear 11: the world and all its wonders

Aug 29, 2011 00:30

Title: the world and all its wonders
Main Story: In the Heart -- EPIC PIRATE AUFlavors, Toppings, Extras: Poached pear 11 (in sickness & in health), chopped nuts (EPIC PIRATE AU), hot fudge, butterscotch, caramel, malt (BTS 20 : Yvonne : I wanna dance with somebody), pocky chain ( Read more... )

[topping] chopped nuts, [extra] malt, [topping] caramel, [topping] butterscotch, [topping] hot fudge, [inactive-author] bookblather, [challenge] poached pear, [extra] pocky chain

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bookblather August 31 2011, 03:49:02 UTC

Thank you very much!

memirra August 29 2011, 05:51:14 UTC

ooh, very nice. Yvonne sure is messed up, I gotta say, but I almost feel sorry for her in that last one; almost. I like how you started and ended on a similar note with the sailors - the ending lines are very capturing.

bookblather August 31 2011, 03:49:28 UTC

Yeah, me too. It's like... to some extent she brought this on herself, but to some extent it's a product of things totally beyond her control. You just feel bad for her even though she's psycho. Thank you!

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bookblather August 31 2011, 03:49:56 UTC

Syphilis. Which was usually referred to as the pox, so. Yeah.

I do feel a little bad for her in this AU, gotta say. Thank you!

toxic_fairie August 29 2011, 06:41:27 UTC

That last one is extraordinary. The last line. Oh man. Fantastic.

bookblather August 31 2011, 03:50:19 UTC

I was writing towards the last line the whole time, so I'm so glad it worked. Thank you!

smoothiegarten August 30 2011, 04:04:01 UTC

UGH, what an awful end. Even though she somehow managed to get WORSE in this AU, it's still unbelievably tragic and painful. You did a fantastic job with the discomfort of those last couple of pockies. And the whole thing, really.

bookblather August 31 2011, 03:50:48 UTC

Really? I almost find her more sympathetic in this AU, because a lot of what she goes through is under no control of hers. Thank you so much!