Poached Pear 5, Cola 8: flash

[bookblather]

Title: flash
Main Story: In the Heart
Flavors, Toppings, Extras: Poached pear 5 (there & back again), cola 8 (reach out and touch someone), My Treat (After being separated, Olivia and Hugh think of each other at the same time), malt (Ichtusfish's easter egg: Each separate dying ember wrought its ghost upon the floor. - Edgar Allan Poe), cherry

Comments

[bookblather]

Thank you. <33 I really don't know what else I can say beyond that.

[memirra]

This is beautifully written, I love how much emotion you put into it, especially the memory part. The memory seems so intense yet simple, and I love how you described the little things like the barrettes and straw hat. I feel bad for the both Hugh and Olivia, though. :c Amazing job!

[bookblather]

It's the little things, I think, that really drive home what they've lost, in some ways. It's tough for them. Thank you.

[shipwreck_light]

This story has a lovely voice to it and I just adore all of the sensory information; how it goes together with what happens. Thank you for posting!

[bookblather]

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you liked it so much.

[hi_falootin]

aw, I love the way you wrote this! All the little details and descriptions of their thoughts. Very nice :)

[bookblather]

That was the stylistic bit. XD It's hard for me to do that, so. I'm glad you liked it! Thank you!

[sarcasticsra]

I have to echo everyone saying that this is just gorgeously written, and the stylistic way it's done works extremely well. Beautiful and heartbreaking all at once; well done.

[bookblather]

Thank you so much! I was kind of skeptical about it but it seems to have worked, so.