Comments | runaway_tales: Guava 23, Blue Raspberry 25: Fading

bookblather in runaway_tales

Guava 23, Blue Raspberry 25: Fading

Jun 12, 2011 18:47

Title: Fading
Main Story: In The HeartFlavors, Toppings, Extras: Guava 23 (more than you can chew), blue raspberry 25 (better luck next time), rainbow sprinkles, butterscotch (four-fifths is prior to Aaron's birth), malt (Back to school 33 : Nathan watching on a stage), pocky chain ( Read more... )

[topping] sprinkles, [challenge] blue raspberry, [extra] malt, [challenge] guava, [topping] butterscotch, [inactive-author] bookblather

Comments 3

sarcasticsra June 13 2011, 03:21:34 UTC

Oooh, that last one. Great ending. This was such a good subject for Limbo; the fading of the word count really fits with the fading away of their marriage. I love how it worked. Excellent job.

bookblather June 13 2011, 05:15:25 UTC

That was what I was going for, definitely! I knew the limbo would have to be something ending, dwindling, and this sort of turned out to be what it was. Thank you so much.

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bookblather June 13 2011, 05:16:14 UTC

Yeah. They weren't doomed, necessarily, but they both have such big conflict-avoidence maneuvers that they never really talked to each other, and that was the end. Thank you.