Comments | runaway_tales: muse of fire

nathskywalker in runaway_tales

muse of fire

Jun 11, 2011 12:09

Author: Nathalia
Rating: R
Challenge:
Quince #18 - the world may never know
Tropical Punch #30 - the end of the earth
Extras / Toppings: blueberries (It is hopelessness even more than pain that crushes the soul. So the decision-making of daily life involves not, as in normal affairs, shifting from one annoying situation to another less annoying - or ( Read more... )

[topping] sprinkles, [author] nathalia, [challenge] tropical punch, [extra] malt, [topping] cookie crumbs, [topping] gummy bunnies, [extra] fresh fruit : pineapple, [extra] fresh fruit : strawberries, [extra] pocky chain, [topping] cherry, [extra] fresh fruit : blueberries, [challenge] quince

Comments 14

lady_macbeth_19 June 11 2011, 12:32:23 UTC

Wow. The Limbo *really* suited this piece: Its soooooo awesome. I really like the slow build up to his suicide as he starts lowing outwards and ends up looking inwards, And those last lines. So powerful. Just really really really good.
This piece is just *really good* :P
I'll stop saying that now
XxLil

nathskywalker July 17 2011, 14:33:59 UTC

Thanks :D
It was hard to write and took me a lot of time but I'm very happy with the disturbing outcome.

tanzyel June 11 2011, 12:32:42 UTC

Oh my gosh! I don't even know what to say... this was reaaaaaaaally creepy- but so well written! It gave me chills...

nathskywalker July 17 2011, 14:34:10 UTC

thanks :)

strawberryella June 11 2011, 21:11:56 UTC

Goosebumps... All I can say is wow. What a fantastic, dark, well-written piece!

nathskywalker June 13 2011, 20:20:16 UTC

Thanks. It took me a long time to write because I had to keep editing to get the format but I'm pleased with the end result :)

hi_falootin June 11 2011, 23:29:00 UTC

ahhhh, that was a great use of the limbo!! disturbing, in a good way :O The whole time I kind of felt like 'NO DON'T!!' even though it was going somewhere inevitable.

nathskywalker July 17 2011, 14:33:16 UTC

It had to go this way so I could screw with several characters. Tim's death is really a plot device, if I'm honest.

shayna611 June 12 2011, 20:55:30 UTC

very nicely done! I can't believe you pulled off the 100/90/80/etc in the first place, but then they all fit so well and didn't feel at all like you even had to try very hard to keep the word count. And I think the tone was perfect too.

nathskywalker June 13 2011, 20:19:16 UTC

I struggled so hard with the word count and kept having to transfer stuff from one section to the next and worked at it from both ends (yeah, cause this makes it that much easier) and all the rewriting in this was killing me. Add a word here, now remove one or two there, rearrange that sentence ... Glad you can't tell.