Comments | runaway_tales: Guava 20, Pistachio 21: Picnics

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Guava 20, Pistachio 21: Picnics

Jun 01, 2011 22:46

Title: Picnics
Main Story: In the HeartFlavors, Toppings, Extras: Guava 20 (I'm a big girl/boy now), pistachio 21 (a picnic), malt (PFAH: Olivia : the past is gone, but something might be found to take its place), whipped cream (Olivia is almost eleven in the first), caramel (Felicity is four in the last one ( Read more... )

[extra] malt, [topping] caramel, [topping] whipped cream, [challenge] guava, [challenge] pistachio, [inactive-author] bookblather

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bookblather June 7 2011, 04:53:58 UTC

Joanna is only thirteen years older than Olivia! She's very young for a grandmother. But she makes it work. Thank you so much!

triskaphobia June 2 2011, 03:29:57 UTC

I like the way you make an emotion come through in a piece. The father pushing away the dread of his daughter's growing up, the boyfriend and girlfriend's feelings for each other and in the final piece the older people recalling their youth through the child's enjoyment of the picnic.

bookblather June 7 2011, 04:54:36 UTC

Well, there's a backstory here-- Olivia gets kidnapped by her mother when she's thirteen, and she doesn't see her father again until she's twenty-seven. Hence the crying in the middle piece, and the joy in the third. Anyway. Thank you!

lady_macbeth_19 June 2 2011, 13:07:21 UTC

N'aw. I love Felicity's tone in the last one: she's adorable. And the description in Jake's one is incredibly moving. :)
XxLil

bookblather June 7 2011, 04:54:48 UTC

Felicity is definitely a sweetheart. Thank you!

kay_brooke June 2 2011, 15:50:15 UTC

I love the variety of these pieces, but how they're so connected as well. The love your characters have for each other always shines through so wonderfully.

bookblather June 7 2011, 04:55:03 UTC

Aww, thank you so much! Yeah, I was going for different snapshots with common ground.

niee87 June 4 2011, 00:12:25 UTC

Aw, Jake, you've got it bad, pal :D I'm glad you do, though! These are adorable and I love how they all fit together. Felicity has awesome grandparents and I can so see Joanna being the most active and racing about with her!

Very sweet :)

bookblather June 7 2011, 04:55:33 UTC

He's so gone over Olivia. Which is a good thing because she's just as gone over him. And Joanna is only thirteen years older than Olivia is-- she's definitely going to be the more active of the two.

Thank you!