Comments | runaway_tales: butter pecan and flavour of the day with butterscotch and a cherry

ninablues in runaway_tales

butter pecan and flavour of the day with butterscotch and a cherry

Jan 31, 2011 20:56

Story: Timeless { backstory | index }
Title: Tricks
Rating: G
Challenge: Butter Pecan #25: tight, FOTD: thimblerig
Toppings/Extras: butterscotch, cherry
Wordcount: 387
Summary: Siobhan Tynker works another night.
Notes: I’m back! Now, let’s start on these flavours of the day. Thimblerig: To cheat or swindle. This is Jacob Graham’s mother (though ( Read more... )

[challenge] butter pecan, [inactive-author] ninablues, [topping] butterscotch, [topping] cherry, [challenge] flavor of the day

Comments 13

luna_moonsilver January 31 2011, 21:56:02 UTC

The voice of this is amazing - I could hear Siobhan's accent in it, and it made the pacing work really well <3

And this made me laugh: “Thunderin’ Jesus, yer about as useless as tits on a bull.” Heh, I loved it :)

ninablues February 1 2011, 08:34:10 UTC

I'm glad I got Siobhan's voice right! :D She's not a character I write about often. Thanks!

walkwithheroes January 31 2011, 23:40:16 UTC

I'm sorry to say that I have to do a drive-by comment, as I'm studying, (please tell no one I'm on the internet!)but:

I love the voice in this. Siobhan really comes to life here, and I adore that. I really loved the last line. Great character piece.

ninablues February 1 2011, 08:34:39 UTC

Aw, that's such a wonderful compliment, thank you! And your secret is safe with me. XD

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ninablues February 1 2011, 08:35:41 UTC

Hahaha, but of course. Man, now I kind of want to do some Jacob-childhood pieces. I've never done any of those!

And thanks for the compliment! :)

ichthusfish February 1 2011, 02:23:42 UTC

He’s not a nice feller but he’ll punch anyone that calls me or my sisters scummy Irish pikey whores, so at least he’s useful for something.

LOL! That's about the best one line description I've seen of a character in a long time. I can see some of Jacob in her to honest. Very nicely done =D

ninablues February 1 2011, 08:36:58 UTC

Yep, I think there is quite a lot of Jacob in her (or vice versa!). He gets his zaniness from being raised in the carnival. :) Thank you!

kaitygirl88 February 1 2011, 05:33:29 UTC

I second Icthusfish! That line had me on the floor, it was so awesome! I also really liked how Mama Jacob was so cynical about everything and yet she still took time to pet her favorite dog. She sounds like a lot of fun and I do hope we see more of her! :D

ninablues February 1 2011, 08:38:17 UTC

I've hardly written about Jacob's past so I'd love to delve into it more... if the prompts are favourable, you probably will see more of her. Thanks so much! :)