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Strawberry #22, Strawberry Banana #6 - In Between

Jun 06, 2010 18:17

Author: askingxalice
Title: In Between
Story: Phase
Timeline: May 2013 - Adrianna and Sarah are 24.
Challenge: Strawberry #22 (flowers), Strawberry Banana #6 (indecision)
Word Count: 721
Rating: PG

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[inactive-author] nikki, [challenge] strawberry banana, [challenge] strawberry

Comments 10

niee87 June 7 2010, 01:46:02 UTC

Awww, I love witnessing poor Adrianna's whirling mind here. We get a great look at her confusion and uncertainty! Sarah's such an enigma sometimes, but she really should trust her friends enough with the truth! Maybe someday :( Hope it works out, one way or another!

crooked_loss June 7 2010, 05:32:28 UTC

Eventually, she will! Angie managed to convince Sarah that she pretty much deserves to be treated like crap by her because she never did anything to stop her and their brother from being abused, so Sarah thinks that if she tells Adrianna and Andy and Oz that they'll pretty hate her forever. So, it'll take a while of coaxing from the rest of the gang to get her to talk about it all.

Thanks for reading! I'm glad this is understandable, since I didn't really have a good grasp on it when I was writing it. It kept going from one train of thought to the next, and I kept having to go back and edit it like crazy.

lady_macbeth_19 June 7 2010, 07:55:45 UTC

:( Poor Adrianna. I love the fact that you can literally see her thoughts whirling though. ♥
XxLil

askingxalice June 8 2010, 03:19:39 UTC

Yay! Going this into perspective for a character's thoughts is really new to me, so I'm glad that it all makes sense. Thanks for reading!

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askingxalice June 8 2010, 03:20:38 UTC

I'm glad it makes sense, and I'm really glad you like it. Thanks for reading! <3

smoothiegarten June 7 2010, 20:34:13 UTC

Good for Sarah. Adrianna's ramblings make a lot of sense, too, considering what just happened and that she's found out about Sarah's feelings for her. I don't blame her for getting a bit ahead of herself. Hopefully they can reconcile and actually talk about things now.

askingxalice June 8 2010, 03:21:28 UTC

Once the muses recharge and I get my writing groove back, I imagine they will. :) I'm still not sure how they will, but I know they will somehow. Thanks for reading!

bookblather June 8 2010, 03:26:52 UTC

Aww, Sarah, trying to reach out a little bit. Hopefully Adrianna can get an explanation out of her when they start talking again. I also love how Adrianna's trying to sort it all out here. I almost hope she is asexual... there's so few characters who are, and I'd really like to see one more. But even if she isn't, I hope she manages to sort it out. You manage to make her confusion followable and reasonably clear, and make us sympathize with her. Kudos!

askingxalice June 8 2010, 03:31:08 UTC

Thank you! And yeah, she's definitely asexual, which is something I didn't even realize about her until I started writing this. My characters always take me by surprise with the oddest stuff...

I'm still debating on how/if her and Sarah become a couple, and how long they stay together or if they even break up. As much as I love them separately, it's very hard to see them together. Maybe they could at least give it a shot and realize it's not working out and end it on friendly terms? IDK.

Thanks for reading! :D