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Orange 22; Gingerbread 5

Jun 04, 2010 14:27

Author: Marina
Story: The Dragon World
Challenge: Orange 22 (I feel your pain), Gingerbread 5 (sleeping beauty)
Toppings/Extras: Cherry (present tense)
Word Count: 354
Rating: PG
Summary: The baggage that Lindsey and Kevin bring with them to the dragon world.
Notes: All the characters have it in varying degrees of severity, and the story is as much ( Read more... )

[author] marina, [challenge] gingerbread, [challenge] orange, [topping] cherry

Comments 11

niee87 June 5 2010, 00:11:49 UTC

Aww, Lindsay! I like this dimension to her, though. It's a nice angle to take with her and does add a lot to her. You should definitely stick with her being the strong one and all the inner turmoil.

smoothiegarten June 6 2010, 04:38:33 UTC

So this does help her? Good. I'll keep going in this vein then (and maybe have her snap at some point, idk). Thankies!

niee87 June 6 2010, 14:16:08 UTC

This definitely helps her, especially if you stick with it and I think her nsapping would be a very logical thing to happen.

lyndsay June 5 2010, 00:28:13 UTC

Omg my name is Lyndsay. Weird. Good thing you spell it normally, otherwise I'd get really confused. =X

Did her boyfriend break up with her because she gained ten pounds, or because she was so worried and stressed? This is such a heartbreaking situation! You really get that feeling that everything is falling apart, and this family is struggling to keep it together. I especially like the first sentence, and how it leads into the story with a bang. :)

smoothiegarten June 6 2010, 04:47:05 UTC

I actually didn't want to give her the name Lindsey because there is also a Laura who came before her (and I already had two C names, in addition) but she grabbed onto it and refused to be named anything else, so she got to keep it.

Did her boyfriend break up with her because she gained ten pounds, or because she was so worried and stressed?

Both. He was already growing tired of having to support her through the trauma and saw the weight gain as a sign that she wasn't going to be worth it (she was letting herself go a bit). Thank you, I'm glad you liked it :)

etacanis June 5 2010, 00:41:16 UTC

I think it's really brave and compassionate the way she lied to her brother. It's interesting.

smoothiegarten June 6 2010, 04:50:01 UTC

Thank you! She really just wants all the hurting to end, not to make it worse.

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smoothiegarten June 6 2010, 04:50:35 UTC

:D I will deliver the actual stuffed dragons soon hopefully! Thank you.

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smoothiegarten June 6 2010, 04:54:00 UTC

Thank you! I hope to get on with how it all goes together very soon, and it looks like I'm doing better with Lindsey's character this go around so YAY. :) She really just wants everything to be okay again and doesn't feel that telling Kevin will help that.