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[shayna611]

Cinnamon Swirl #30. In the Blink of an Eye with Malt
Story : knights & necromancers
Rating : R
Timeframe : 1240
Word Count : 687 (7 part pocky chain)
Malt Prompt : Stocking Stuffer '09 from C - "That's not magic

Comments

[lyndsay]

Ah it's funny, I am also working on a character pocky-chain that mentions the character being unusually fast! It doesn't center around it, though, and I like how this one does.

I like how everyone seems to be doubting him, and Tristan presses on to prove himself anyway. The first one is my favorite. That initial feeling of awe and disbelief at his own victory is really thrilling, and it's a great introduction to show where that power's led him. Good stuff~

[shayna611]

Thanks! :)

Funny thing is though, they're right and he's wrong. He's not actually fast, he's unintentionally using magic and putting himself in two places at once, but he doesn't know that, so he comes up with his own explanation.

[lyndsay]

I actually suspected that, especially when I read the last pocky. You get that feeling that something else is going on and it's not exactly what he thinks.

His magic reminds me of a piece you wrote, I don't remember the title, but it's when Ski and him are making dinner and then he agrees to help people mend their ailments even though Ski thinks it's a bad idea. Seems like it's very in line with his character, or something.

[shayna611]

That was Rune - he's the healer. (I know, I have way too many characters) Tristan's powers deal with space - he can be two places at once, sort of teleport himself and other objects - his is the earth goddess.

He does concede to Sethan and start admitting that it's something more than skill, and starts honing his magic even playing around with it for kicks eventually

[shayna611]

yay! you're back!

Thank you :)

The chains have been fun and an interesting way of sort of summing up the characters and their personal threads. Tristan doesn't get a whole lot of air time, so most of his was actually new material.

[shayna611]

yes! get to writing! and go gimme some prompts! I should have the rules up for the summer challenge soon.

[smoothiegarten]

I went back and flipped through your pocky chains, and I really like them. They're nice introductions to the characters. Even though Tristan's is shorter, the flow is nice, and I like the theme of his quickness running through it.

[shayna611]

Thank you! :)

[ichthusfish]

I loved this one a lot, mostly for Tristan's complete denial of what his happening to him on a day to day basis. I wonder, if he hadn't met Sethan, if he ever would have figured it out. Nice work :)

[shayna611]

Thanks! :)

You know, I don't think he would have. Sethan pretty much beats him over the head with it and he still tries to deny it for awhile. Then again, if he'd stuck around Ski and the others long enough they might have figured it out too.

[mpiper]

If he hadn't met Sethan he'd have bled to death after he took that killing blow meant for Ski in part 6 above. Too bad he hadn't realized the magic before then.

[shayna611]

good point

[mpiper]

Tristan's is my favorite of all the magics available in your world.

[shayna611]

I really do like the way his powers worked themselves out - I don't think it's something I've seen before